Faded eyes, preoccupied
to see, lucidly, within me,
oblivious to my soft soul,
ole, forgetful, sister Tami.
Lacking, wisdom and compassion,
cursed by hallucinations
once I upheld her own virtue
though facing false accusations
Tim Almighty, no thanks, you witch,
I'd suggest not to cast your stones
for I've opened my heart's door,
but you're too deaf to hear my groans
Now taste of your Hell-Bound E v i l,
the very spell you wish for me
and know your screams, will go unheard
like a rock, down-casted at sea
Author notes
"Friends Are God's Way Of Making Up For Family."
Just Venting,
And Most Frustrated
With Those Breaking My Trust.
Thanks For Your Time,
And For Those That Care, Thanks.
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver~
Written March 10th, 2006
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Thanks!
Thanks for understanding, you read me well,
thanks for being you, as always, so sweet to me.
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hmmmmm...my friend and bro, I hear the anger in this write..i read it, however what I feel is the pain that this anger comes from
, (yours) for that is what it is, the hurt of having been betrayed , and therefore the anger is so justified , because betrayal is thw worst kick into the heart. I wish you the best , i wish you comfort and healing from this...and there will be peace again ( but we have to go to the dark in order to see the light again)
much love,
xoxoxo
reenie
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Lacking, wisdom and compassion,
cursed by hallucinations
once I upheld her own virtue
though facing false accusations
In a nutshell, basically saying things untrue, like I don't care, and ect...yada.yada..Thanks for reading me, peace, -Timothy~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ -
Sounds to me like someone has betrayed you and it bothers you a bunch. I have no idea who or what the situation is about, but this is a good vent.
The second stanza is certainly interesting.
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good read
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dustookie2, glad you could appreciate where I was coming from, thanks for your time and comment, laters friend!
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Thanks!
Schatzi Elfe, thanks for reading, glad you liked my word use, and also thanks for the couple of tips, I brushed it up a bit, thanks again my fellow poet friend. -Timothy~
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Josephine, thanks for your understanding,
and time reading me, peace!
-Timothy~
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good rant for me
good rant and venting is good for the soul at times. nice dark piece and i just love the dark.the power and strength from this piece is awesome... the place to go the kick arse or vent anger.....does this mean you must be a calm personality.......but i am smiling because it feels good to read this and get rid of some anger....nice work -
Eerie & Dark
Wonderfully dark piece. Ranting is good for the soul, and you have done this very poetically. A couple of suggests "Carelessly preoccupied to see" is a little awkward to me, and "you're to deaf" should be ~you're too deaf~ I think Especially love your word usage and the last line is a knockout. Keep it up!!!
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where are they hmmm...looks around for whom to kick in the bum
ok sorry but wanted to make ya smile 
I hope you are feeling better soon just remember that nothing can have power over you unless you let it
take care and God bless sweet one
huggles
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It is very hard to ever trust again once We are hurt, and even harder to love fully again, for We are but Human and have feelings, and deep down No One wants to be hurt over and over, I hope Your heart mends soon... Josephine.
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timothy---this will probably be the only time i 'scold' you. do not ever again apologize to me for being human and for being you. never do you have to do that with me!!!!! i do not wish you to be anything but who and what you are. that includes these feelings. you have shown me something good in this. you are angry, yet you are not drunk, screaming at me or being inhumane to people. cutting one out of your life for a time is one thing. being unnnecessarily cruel is another. please do not feel you ever have to apologize for showing me all sides of your being. you are a friend whom i have grown to love and anything less than honesty, truth and reality from you would not suit the friendship i have come to enjoy with you. albeit online but i value you just as much as i do the neighbor. as a matter of fact, i do not even know their names and i have lived here since november. that is a sad state if you ask me. i would be more inclined to invite you, your wife and timmy to dinner than i would them. so now what?
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Thanks!
Thanks Viyanna, I know, I'm sorry you had to read these feelings, but then again, I am in need of a true friend, so that I can be on the mend, and back on my feet again, thanks for showing your love, and yes, I'm human, and very emotional, like most poets, lol.. But love will find away, I will embrace the love you always show, and be happy for the unconditional love I've found in you! Thanks for reading, and caring for me. Always your forever friend, Timothy
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Thanks!
Thanks for your time and I'm glad you took the time to read me, I appreciat that. Laters my friend.
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WOW!!!! as soon as i saw your name, i had to read. i must say-timothy-you have shocked me. to hear this from one i know who only shows love is a surprise. oh gosh--you are human??? now what am i to do? i so still love you and am angry as well with the one who has done this to you. you wrote this so very well. it is so packed with emotion that it is almost scary. wow!! and i am sorry that you are having to deal with this on top of everything else. i hope you know that i am now and always will be your friend. i cringe at the though that the brick wall would ever be towards myself.
i am applauding, not the anger, but the expressing of it in such a jpowerful and effective manner. no one got hit and that is a positive lesson for me.
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"and know your screams, will go unheard
like a rock, down-casted at sea"
I really liked that part. But the whole thing was great. keep up the good work.
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Thanks, yea, intense, like me at the moment, but I surely appreciate your time reading me, Thanks.
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I'm going to watch my back!
Yikes! This sounds like my old teacher in High School when he was mad at the class! I'm gonna get detention for sure! Hey, this poem totally gets the reader by the throat when he tries to catch his breath, hoping it ends with everybody still alive! Super write! -
Powerful Piece!
Carelessly preoccupied
to see, lucidly, within me,
oblivious to my soft soul,
ole, forgetful, sister Tami.
Yea, it sure is sad when no-one has time to make for you, until they need something that is. Whoever could destroy a heart of gold like yours, will in return get theirs. Know you have so many who care for you, and we'll be here to show it!
Hope you know this is truth!
Your Best-Friend For Life.
-Me
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Excellence in Salvation Awesome!
Dearest Timothy,
In your soul visions lucidly
I feel your heart weeping
Run from “Hell-Bound E v i l,”
He or she who casts the first stone
Do they walk in darkness alone?
Darling you know that old saying
“Sticks & Stones Can Break My Bones
But Names Can Really Hurt Me!”
There is power in words
And some words do hurt!
Tis good to let off steam
Your loving engine is clean
Better to get this off your chest
And redress your loving tenderness.
I hope that things get better
For my love is everywhere
Your imagery is mega force powerful my darling
The background enhances the fervour fires of this commanding write!
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Thanks!
Thanks Angel of wolves, I appreciate you reading me, even though this piece is far from uplifting, you do understand we're human, and for this, I thank you, I just wish my heart could give love like before, and not be destroyed. Oh well, I have you, and souls kind like yourself to help me, and uplift me, so that I can soar once again, thanks my AP sis, and forever friend! -Timothy
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A very intense piece, brother! Vent away! Sometimes the best way to cleanse the heart and mind of its' evils is just to vent and I would say you did it well! Love you much!!!!
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