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War

Take me not down that path of war~
It bleeds my soul of what it needs.
It's tragedy is not declared, win or loss~
but the ones it leaves to grieve.

There are no winners in this fray~
but death and pain and sorrow.
The path to peace in brighter days~
lies in negotiating a better tomorrow.

                 ~~~Suseann~~~

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  • suseann
    October 22, 2006
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    A note to shivanarani; you will find not every line of a poem is defined by a rhyming scheme every time. And,I happen to be developing my own style in writing rhymed poetry.It may not be to your likeing,but you too will eventually strike out in developing a personalized pattern all your own ,if you stay with it long enough.So you see,nothing PURTURBED here! Personal matter of taste is not a rule.Thanks for reading my feature and commenting though.~~Suseann


  • baawri
    October 22, 2006
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    beautiful

    Rhyming scheme is a bit perturbed still the flow of the poem sounds good and the theme it captures is marvellous.keep it up
    Edited on Oct 22, 12:00 because 'misspell'.


  • Tam
    October 22, 2006
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    IMPRESSIVE!

    Beautiful write!
    Your words flow with truth and compassion.
    The last line is the sum of all wisdom indeed.
    Profound and powerful within a short poem. How did you do this? Impressive to say the least.
    Blessings! Tammy


  • Redline
    October 22, 2006
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    this is an amazing poem...and I totally agree with the argument against war in here. Well done!


  • Watuwant silver member
    March 11, 2006
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    Perhaps they are random, yet they resonate, especially for those of us who find war a loathsome past time for a primitive species. Let us continue to hope that sanity prevails.
    Nicely contemplative piece, suseann.
    peace
    doug

  • my-star-is-max
    March 10, 2006
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    its good that you brought a debateable topic into a poem , short but sweet, well done


  • Gemini Dream
    March 9, 2006
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    Far out!

    It's always good to hear that there are still war protesters out there. I'm not sure if you're fermiliar with Naomi Shab Nye, but she's a arib-american poet that writes alot of anti-war poetry too. Thats what this one reminded me of.

    I like the line that says "The path to peace of brighter days~
    lies in negotiating a better tomorrow."

    It's so true dude.
    A truley nice job!

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