We told the priest of God
And he loved us for it,
We told the priest of Hell
And he cried for us.
Our bodies fractured
And our minds worn out
We knew so much of life
And so little of love
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I'd really like to improve this, so please think of something that I could change for the better.
Written March 9th, 2006
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Don't agree
I see from your little poem the two points of heaven, the beautiful side and the burning part of hell, For god is loved and goes to heaven and the evil go down to hell. I think that i right anyway thats what i felt from your little poem, maybe if you added a little more to it people will see where you were coming from when you wrote this wonderful piece but i honestly thinkit is just wonderful.
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Oh well.... so much there like a small well that goes deep so deep!
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i agree with both.. i think it's really hard to grasp a concept of what you're trying to say here.. it would probably help if you went into more detail when you wrote.. or explained a bit in the title.. however i thought the poem was rather unique.. good job on that.
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Confusing
I agree with the person above me, it's really hard to understand what you are talking about. Mabye if you went more into depth and explained the situation it would be. -
this is ok...i like it but it doesnt make alotta sense to me
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