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You gaze quietly
at the sky
the moons beams play
upon your brown eyes
you count each star
as they silently awake
marveling at the wonders
that God has made

               **...you close your eyes
                   as a single tear drop
                   falls to the ground...**

the hurt and pain
has all added up
and suddenly become
all too much
the drugs the alcohol
you used to use
you now see
that you have abused
now as you lay
in the dark night
with only the moon
and the stars for light
your guardian angel
looks upon you and weeps
for she sees the man
hidden so deep
and as her tears
fall down pure cheeks
they hit your face
and you start to speak....

           ...'Dear Lord,
you pray,
              'Forgive my sins
               I know what I've done
               who I've become
               But I also know
               the love you hold
               the promises that you've told
so I pray,
               Dear Lord please,
               take me
               make me
               for I now know
               the strength I need
               can only be found
               with you behind me

               with you as my strength
               with you as my shield
               I can do anything
               so I yield
               everything to you
               everything I have
               erase my past
               let me start afresh...'

               **...the single tear
               that you shed
               hits the ground
               as the angels sing...**

for the broken man
Now stands tall once again

Author notes

I wrote this for a very dear friend of mine who is going through a rough time. think what you want of it for I know its not that great, I also left out puncuation for the readers purpose, you can put the puncuation anywhere you want to make it sound any way you want.
Written March 8th, 2006

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  • CorruptDragon
    March 20, 2006
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    Thanks babe it does make me feel a little better but as you know it wasnt a cure.


  • DemonikVamp
    March 13, 2006
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    it sounds like someone close to you died or hurt you really bad. i know what your going through. i dont like religion at all. im athiest so i would never write anything to god (which i think is fake) but its a good write.


  • Sorrows Redemption
    March 9, 2006
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    "Not that good?" This is amzing! I bet your friend is having a pretty hard time stayng down after this lol, truly inspirational. Keep up the good work, and being a good friend.


  • aRdNeK
    March 9, 2006
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    This is an awesome write! I'm sure your friend will love this poem. It's very beautifully written and the rhyming is incredible. Truly an outstanding piece, and I can clearly see everything happening in my mind as I read it. Great job! Keep up the amazing work!


  • downritehappy
    March 8, 2006
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    I once was broken, this was great.

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