The Flame in my heart
burns just for you.
My love for you grows
deeper with each Sunset
in the sky.
With each vibrant color
burning into
the night.....
Is just like the Flame I
carry in my heart.
With each look, touch, and
smile you represent.....
I see how strong your Flame
is burning in your heart too.
Your Flame is like the bright
Orange color of the Sunrise.
You are the Sunrise and I am the
Sunset.
Our love goes together hand in hand.
This love we have for each other is
an unforseen love.
It is greater than both us put
together.
We have a bond that can not
be broken.
For this reason I will cherish
our love forever.
Yvonne J. Griffin
02/04/03
Author notes
I wrote this because of my friend and I... We are the "the couple" that is not a "couple".... Maybe one day we will finally see what everyone else sees.
he he he
Written February 4th, 2003
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Very nice Yvonne!!!
Sometimes others see what we cannot.....we cast away their words because we don't want to believe them....Sometimes we need to actually listen to them and what they are saying.....open our eyes and see what they are seeing.....yours are opened slightly just from what you have written....hopefully they have opened more since February when you wrote this.......beautifully written....as always.....leance
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Ah thats beautiful! The part about being the sunrise and sunset seems like the lovers are complete opposites, yet have so much in common, and they are soo in love. I like this alot! Beautiful way to express love
~Dria
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tis beautiful Yvonne
on critque for improvement my perception sees possibilities to play with the word choices more
eg. second stanza doing in the sky twice perhaps with some word change the piece could be strengthened a tad more.
some of the lines are a touch cliche'
but it does make for a lovely piece
well written Smiley one
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hmm,, really nice work.. another nice poem ;)
Love,
Sehrish~ -
Seems as if you already see it Yvonne...your feelings are very apparent here and you said it so softly and beautifully
Now you need to let your muse know my friend
Beautiful work as always...you never disappoint
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Truly beautiful, Yvonne "You are the sunrise and I am the sunset"...such precious words and stunning images
I'm gonna have to read more of you I'm really enjoying your style!!!
Take care,
Karen -
Yvonne, isn't it wonderful when a poem flows out so easily like this one. I enjoyed it, and felt it, and lived it. To feel someone for everything about them is the most beautiful feeling. Thanks for sharing it. ~Bud~
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"You are the Sunrise and I am the
Sunset.
Our love goes together hand in hand"
I like this part. True love should go hand and hand.
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ohh this is so sweet Yvonne!!! To truly cherish someone this much really touches the heart..a most beautiful write!!! all best wishes to you that the flame burns eternally!! a very touching piece!!
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This is beautiful
Undying love don't ya just love it!
I love the title too
Great poem
Hattie
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