Fading away into the background of your lives,
Silenced into insignificance,
Losing grip on everything that once meant so much.
Wishing away my dreams,
Hiding the pieces so no one notices how broken I've become,
Hollow distance fades everything that we were.
Lonely with out a reason to believe.
Author notes
Sometimes I just run out of smiles...
Just some things I've realised/started to notice recently, probably won't make any sense to anyone else.
xxx
Written March 8th, 2006
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thanks
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Wow your style has come a way since I last spent time on AP 6 months ago or something like that. I really think this is great because it seems like a piece that could easily have become clichéd but didn't due to your unique phrases and choice of words. Short and precise I think this is very effective.
"Hiding the pieces so no one notices how broken I've become," - love it!
Oh yeah thanks for your comment on my rave on music, had lots of fun writing that one.
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thankyuo
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This was an emotional piece, really deep, very beautiful but still very sad... the last line ties it all together, this is a brilliant piece, but you have to remember how much you mean to everyone and how much your loved xxxxxxxx
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very good i like it alot.
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YES, this poem is so true, i agree, the best i've read so far. the words are perfectly used and the way you wrote it is just as I would have written it myself. i love the last line, it says it all in your poem. i would have titled it something besides "background", but all in all you did a great job with this poem, quite well done. it's short, and it draws the reader and it tells them exactly what they need to know about how you feel. the 2nd stanza is the best i think. great job
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