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Devil's Kiss

Steel, Metal, Sharp
Release my pain.
Everything to gain,
Blood red sins poor out of me.

The throbbing feels good,
Wanting more.
Cutting deeper,
Feeling weaker.

Feeling faint,
Love this game.
Deserving this,
Devils kiss.

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Written March 8th, 2006

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  • Frozen love
    March 8, 2006
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    This is realli good...i am a cutter...and i like how u use metaphors...its realli good....like Bholds...i like those 2 lines ver much...great job


  • Bholds
    March 8, 2006
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    I enjoyed reading this although it did make me cringe just a little. I used to be a cutter. I like the metaphore of the devils kiss.

    "Cutting deeper,
    Feeling weaker."

    For some reason I enjoy those lines a lot.


  • darkvixenpoet
    March 8, 2006
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    I'v written a few like this before. Well dont my friend. The choppiness added intense emotion. I like it ^_^