Yes i'm in love,
Though sharp edges dictate the mood,
There are wings that can't fly,
Silouetted by the shells of days,
Forgotten in the scrawls of everyday,
Neglected plans,
Conversed with the sequined love,
Unlocking the elegant curves,
Of starry nights spent in dreaming,
Lost dreams lost in concentration,
Permeate the blocks of compulsory tasks,
Wings are chained and hollow,
Flimsy as the hearts,
Hearts that tell of feelings that were broken by the cruel shards of life,
Are escaping on the flimsy feathers,
Jagged feathers to pierce the suns laughing,
Hollow,
Face.
Author notes
Written March 8th, 2006
A contest entry
- Close Your Eyes by Fakaba Saa.
300 points, ended March 15, 2006, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is really good, and i see lots of your life in this poem. i think the line
"Of starry nights spent in dreaming,"
is really beautiful and i like the way your line length is varied throughout. keep it up luv commenting once more one -
well I might as well take my entry out of the contest. I ain't gonna win compared to that. Lol no i am keeping it XD
Syd
p.s. good luck in the contest. Really I think you have a good chance -
Good Good.
Oh wow. I love it. Must've been a crazy picture you drew.
Definately a good one, keep it up. Try making some more, see how they come out, too.
All in all, a good entry. I'll definately consider this one.
--Connor
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