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Seedless Grapes

Missing image
And when it comes,

the new creation,
seedless grapes,

our last mutation;


perseverance bleeding pride,
dry moon
stops pulling in the tide,

wild ocean
sinks
inside
the floor,

fire
dances saltless shore.


And love will plead with God
to save,

at least, the whisper
in the wave.













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  • fjola
    March 2

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    I think this is absolutely beautiful. Though, I should wonder how it ties in with my contest's theme?


    • kaibab silver member
      March 2
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      Well I just thought it was a calm and peaceful sip of resolve...
      to not panic and think about what could be saved

      • fjola
        March 2
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        Fair point. I stand corrected.


        • kaibab silver member
          March 2
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          Hopefully we have a month or so before this "tea-party"..but who really knows these things...

          • fjola
            March 2
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            Haha, yes. XD Good luck to you in my contest!


  • retribusive
    March 2

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    "This is mad good," is exactly what I said out loud after reading this. Very nice work. The imagery is there, and the poem speaks in such great volume that it literally seemed to surround me.

    Great job. Good luck in the contest.


  • alexandrathegreat
    September 2, 2007

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    This is more poetic then I most of the poems entered into the contest more of a serene look. Wonderfully said.


  • DancingRed
    April 11, 2007

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    I'm getting a most curious feeling of déjà vu; I've read this poem before. In fact, it's like visiting a very old friend. I loved this poem then, and I still love it.
    Your words paint an extremely vivid picture of the world ending. Lines 5 to eleven, especially. The rhyme only enhances the images, making them all the more powerful.
    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.


  • Tweedle Dee
    June 13, 2006
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    What you lost it? Those seeds are seedless!!! MUWAHAHAHAHHAA ... This poem... The pictures... make me do sit ups... I liked it!!! It took my breathe AWWWWAYYYYY!!! ****HELP NO AIR ****

    ~ Suffocates quietly and dies on floor ~
    Tweedle Da Dee


  • Tweedle Dum
    June 13, 2006
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    I can't find my seeds!!! Noo! Not again...oh yeah this is a great poem you got here! Now what did you do with my seeds???

    -do the cha cha-
    Tweedle Da Dum


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 30, 2006
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    "And love will plead

    with God ...

    to save

    At least the

    whisper

    in the

    wave."

    Magnificent, Rich...I understand & appreciate this one on so many levels, my Friend...Good luck in the contest, Scribe... Wanda


  • neoladyem
    April 4, 2006
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    This is very nicely done right here. I love the title. It's so creative and original. Espically to have it in this contest. Good Job.


  • Porcelain Shark
    March 17, 2006
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    Great form, I agree with Amythest that it contributes. Gives the effect of being in dark waters with your words.
    'and love will plead with God... to save at least the whisper in the wave'
    Brilliant...


  • Amythest Moonjade
    March 10, 2006
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    Merry Meet,

    this is very good. Nice form in way it was written. That really contributed to effect of the poem


  • Ishvara
    March 8, 2006
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    This is a great read, well done, I like the form you put it in and the small but significant words and phrases you used.

    Good luck and thanks for entering.

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