Ghastly like ghosts I disappeared.
A gentle gliding out,
Like a calf that just now got seared
As I am standing on this mount.
Bored and bewildered at this sight
I move along quickly;
Forgetting about lovely nights,
But this leaves me thickly.
Author notes
ya... this is supposed to be metered.... but i suck at counting appearently.... so ya... lol
Written March 7th, 2006
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hmmm... interesting poem eh. i'm not sure excactly what ur talking about in it half the time but cheah that makes it all the better eh!
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Ok...wow. Nice thoughts, but I think they didn't translate well into words. Like a calf that just now got seared? As interesting as that sounds, it didn't come out so well in my mind when I was reading it. I think it might be good if you stuck with free verse.
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