Today I lost my temper, I had to let it out
It built right up inside me and I just had to shout
My colleagues looked in horror as my long fuse just blew
Instead of quiet Rosalind they found someone quite new
I'd just been to a meeting, team spirit was the game
No I in team was mentioned our goals were all the same
I went back to the workplace brim full with great ideas
So what was it that happened to bring me close to tears
One person in a moment destroyed what there had been
A whole new true blue spirit had turned a shade of green
I should have risen higher jumped over that barred gate
But in a flash of anger I felt my plans deflate
How can a team move forward when one thinks their the best
The only one to work hard and beggar all the rest
They feel so darn hard done by they can't see where they are
Perhaps this is what's stopped them from reaching for a star
Well now my angers over and I will try once more
My head will raise much higher as I walk through that door
Perhaps things will be different we'll have to wait and see
At least I've said my piece now, they can't take that from me
A wheel needs to keep turning all cogs must work in tune
And if we work together we can reach for the moon
Put ego's far behind us and work like we are one
And then we'll share together a job that is well done
Author notes
Written March 7th, 2006
A contest entry
- Deepest and darkest emotions by ImNot.
400 points, ended March 18, 2006, 14 entries
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4000 points, ended September 7, 2008, 50 entries
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Thank you for your entry in the contest. A very humourous and telling poem about a side of you we don't normally see. Excellent in both rhyme and flow and a joy to read.
All the best at judging
Sue and Jeff
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Wow.
I really like this writ. It's very personal and I feel like most people can relate. I know I can lol. Really goo job. well done. I like the flow too!!!
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good job expressing anger in a good way,you delt with it in a mannerly form hats off to you hope they treat you better at work now
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Great write!! While I'm not one for confrontation, kudos! Wish I had the guts to stand up to someone I work with
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nice and iknow its hard to describe real tmie life good job
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Well Done
Awesome poem, loved the story feel to it. Writeing is my personal favorite way to let off steam, you did it quite well here, and in good form, Enjoyed the piece and dont let those buttheads get to ya Keep up the great poetry and thanks for the opportunity to read it!
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Very Good
It is a good thing to have picked a real experience. With that you are easily able to reach deep inside and put, just how you wnat them, your words. I usually dont like AABB format but I must say that this was acceptable to my personal tastes (not meant in a bad way but a good way). I tuly liked this piece in its entirety. Very raw and emotional in the configuration of words and sentence structure. I found it most enjoyable. -
John I appreciate the long reply and you are so right.i feel o much better for lettin go.Perhaps this way things can move forward at work.Keeping quiet can sometimes have a detrimental effect.Thanks again, Ros
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Strong feelings. I like the way you picked a very, real experience to write about. I enjoy reading that sort of poetry and you did a very, good job in writing this. It was very, descriptive and your verses flowed skillfully. I can relate to this poem so much. Actually, I can that many people can relate to this poem though. Its good that you were able to say your piece. Many people think its better to hold some of our emotions in but when we are angry I think it is good to let things go just a little. We were not meant to keep things like that pinned up inside us. When we don't let those things out, that's where stress builds and why having a stressful job or life can even lead to health probles. Well, I guess this was a long reply. Great poem. john
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Oh My Goodnes can I realte to this. I know just what you are writng about in this poem. You have done a really good job writing this poem. I so enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good job.
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Ack, what a mean person that must be! Yay for letting off steam!
Poem wise this is excellent! The rhymes are perfect but not forced, though with such long lines sometimes you need to go back and read the previous line. Nice word choice as well, and no spelling/grammar mistakes that I can see...
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whew! that person sounds like a jerk! but it was great that you could still regain calm and walk in, head held high. i commend you upon that! this poem was excellent as well, i could really sense some frustation maybe? in this. really well done.
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It's great to let steam off, you certainly did that here. Well done. Loved it.
debs
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Know how you feel!!! Great write!! xxx
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Great job. I hope your really sounded off at work. I like the allusion to Rosalind.
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Excellent story poem. Well written. Good flow.
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