I run through the clouds
Dancing and singing
Watching over the galaxy
Guiding all with my light
I remember the days of old
When life was much simpler
When cloud-watching was fun
When I was truly appreciated
I rise with a smile everyday
Putting the colors into the sunrise
Yet now it is few who enjoy the beauty
But those few make it worth getting up each day
I cast away the darkness
The fears and the hate
I bring the peace and harmony
Shining the light onto humanity
Author notes
This poem was written for the poetry class I'm taking here on the site right now called "Poetic Basics for ages 10 to 18" I don't think I've ever written a poem with personification, so I can say that this is my first poem using that technique. I was definately different writing this, but I think I may try this again later on. Enjoy!
Written March 7th, 2006
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I really like this!
I never thought about what the sun must feel, having to get up each day to try and bring life to a dying world. This put it into excellent context, without rhyme and it still fit together and flowed quite nicely.
Excellent Write!
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healing and uplifting!
your poetry stirs up emotion in me!iys nice to hear such positive words!my fave lines:"but those few make it worth getting up each day"/"I cast away the darkness the fears and the hate" -
Thank you very much for your comment and applause
And thanks for correcting that mistake. I'm not offended at all 
Not sure why I would be.... I've gotten 37 views on this poem and you are the first person to tell me that I had a spelling mistake in it. Thanks for explaining your poem as well 
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Very Good
As I'm reading The Sun, I'm beginning to understand myself more and more clearly, and now I can explain what I meant by writing Mad Moon: it was just the opposite of what you meant by writing The Sun. It's not so easy to say it in plain words, and for that reason we write poetry !
As for the Eastern Block: it was a real prison for people like us; the place was Eastern Europe and the countries were the ex-Soviet Union and the like. I can't tell you everything about the wretched life we were compelled to live but I didn't lose my hope, although some of my dark poems sound desperate.
And just a little question, I wouldn't like to offend you,but did you mean shining instead of shinning (the first word of the last line of The Sun)? -
You are welcome I loved it so much!!!
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Thanks for your commend, Hend This is one of my better poems that I wrote so I'm glad you read this one. Thanks again
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WOW this is very beautiful!!! Great imagery!!! Well done!
Hend
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Wow! I'm blown away. You've done such a great job on the imagery. Especially the line "I run through the clouds dancing and singing." that was just gorgeous. You my friend have the poetic talent most of us on this site wish they had. Teach me O great one! Haha. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
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PERFECT!!! You know how to personify! Not many people know how to personify. You did. I love the way you said that the sun guides, runs, and dances. You did a fantastic job with this poem. Good luck with my contest, and good job!!!
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I think that this is beautiful. It does remind me of a sun, yet, I can also see life and problems and such in it. It is a wonderful personification. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
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I am reminded of the following, from the Psalms:
"In them He has set a tabernacle for the sun,
Which is like a bridegroom coming out of his chamber,
And rejoices like a strong man to run its race.
Its rising is from one end of heaven,
And its circuit to the other end;
And there is nothing hidden from its heat."--Ps. 19:4-6
A very majestic write, worthy of that which it personifies. I can also see in this the exuberance of the sun, as I know it.
Great work!
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I agree with Burnt Orgami! this is such a great, positive poem, job very well done on this! BRAVO!!
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i like this, it is very positive. thanks for entering and good luck spill ink and twist me into the shape of love.
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Magesticly brilliant
Brilliantly, our positive input gives rise to wondrous seeds sown and known for posterity. How marvellous, Tim, are your words so bright- 'for darkened humanity.
~*Milly
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well this class sure is doing wonders...i just lov this piece, one of ur better writes...and just plain wow! i could feel the sun's sadness ... and the majesty it feels...mMm, one thing that i found a shame was the title that gave it away...but then again, i wouldn't no wat to change it too...
all in all i think u did a wonderful job, keep it up mate!
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great job keep it ou and still try and be better in your vocalubary..
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