Water flows across the window,
glass obscured by tears from sky,
leafless trees sweat in the cold,
yet here inside i'm warm and dry.
The pencil leaden clouds above,
let grey light through but nothing more,
dull shadows creep across the rooftops,
and melt into the sodden floor.
The artificial light inside,
creates a sunnier point of view,
but still outside it's dark and lonely,
where the misery of life rings true.
Sunlight plays upon the window,
glass obscured by light of sky,
green-leafed trees sweat in the warmth,
still inside i'm warm and dry.
The cotton-wool balled clouds above,
let all the yellow light invade,
crisp shadows flow across the rooftops,
and in every little crack pervade.
The artificial light inside,
keeps that sunny point of view,
outside no longer dark and lonely,
that miserable life no longer true.
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Written March 7th, 2006
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beautiful i love it
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Aww I really liked this it was awesome my favorite part was the end
"The artificial light inside,
keeps that sunny point of view,
outside no longer dark and lonely,
that miserable life no longer true."
It made me happy^_^
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Very nicely written. I really enjoyed reading it and I loved your word choice and use of language. I especially liked this line "The artificial light inside,
creates a sunnier point of view"
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that was really really really really reall... etc et etc... errr... whrere was i? oh yeh... really really good!!!1 made me think a lot too,,, very well written. and i flowed well, good on you to promote this, i would've if i could write like tht. well dont and good lukk on the contest
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pretty, and good descriptive words. I enjoyed this. Good job, keep it up, you're amazing.
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good
The change, the submision, then the meditations and reflective clear messages we donate, this is of a par of frequency that donates calm, thanks. -
Fantastic poem
Your use of language in this poem was exceptional - I read it several times and then closed my eyes and was there. I moved to Australia to escape the rain so it had special meaing for me. This is contest material, well done. -
This is such an amazing poem, although I love the rain. You used such wonderful words and the sentences flow and fit wonderfully together. Well done on this.
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I love the rain! Not in a kind of Travis Bickle sense though... But it is lovely, keeps people out of my way. I hate umbrellas though. Stupid things.
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