Darkness is all I see
There is no light, no air to breathe
I feel so cold, an empty page
A state of limbo with my own rage
The smell of earth, pungent and strong
"Don't leave me here, I'm not yet gone"
To the hollow, echoed sound
My box of steel thuds to the ground
The dirt pours quickly on my grave
Yet, still praying I will be saved
Disappearing deep within this tomb
Silently I lie, accept my doom
A peaceful serenity takes me away
To a place no longer dismal and grey
I fly upon the wings of tomorrow
Take away all your sadness and sorrow
I'm sheltered now, in the purity
Of God and his angels of mercy
To watch over, keep you from harm
Till your time arrives in the Lord's loving arms
Don't weep for me, not one more tear
I accept that my fate is here
Yes I'm gone, so don't forget
I've lived my life without regret
My time was up, now I'm home
But you'll never be alone
For one day we will meet again
When you reach the gates of my heaven
Author notes
Choosing option number 3, I know this probably isn't exactly what you were looking for, but it was what hit me.
Just a little insight into the write...
I have been technically dead. And though many people wouldn't or won't believe, I can "remember", if you will, some of the, let's call them experiences, that took place within those brief moments. And to this day, I have flashbacks of that incident and experience that took place so many years ago...some a hellish nightmare while others are an essence of serene calm.
Written March 7th, 2006
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A contest entry
- Gothic Romance by Immortal Obscurity.
300 points, ended March 14, 2006, 8 entries
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Moving
This is a truly beautiful dark poem. your personal feelings radiate from this one. Well done! I can't relate to being dead, but this struck a cord inside me never-the-less.
So, bravo!
Blessings,
Gabby -
This is great work. While I can never relate to being dead, I can relate to being dead to the world. A feeling I am most intimate with. A lovely dark piece, Storm. Most lovely.
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Well, I could already sense that this was very personal, even before ai read your note. I, myself, was 'dead' inside for a long time, and I understand your feelings completely. Also, about the option, I am glad that you took a different approach to writing about Death... Not many people can pull it off. Anyways, good job, and thanks for entering!
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awesome poem. I really really got caught up in the emotions of this one. The flow was excellent as well as the wording which you use so well to describe your 'doon'. Well done!
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