KiSS me s
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Kill me DrUnK
Paint my PalE WhitE ((skin)) with
||Gashes|| of rUbY .r.e.d.
Pretend like there is nothing wrong.
The world Still... S. I. S.
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You [.Blew.] my <3 Heart <3 to p i e c e s
and i was never able to put them back
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And Baby
I (un).LoVe. You
<3
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Written March 6th, 2006
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No, I think it needs all the sticky caps etc to make it stand out more, because its short. The visual representation gives it more meaning, especally on the S.P.I.N which confuses people to begin with, like you feel when you spin a little too fast. Original work.
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Hm....I'm not a fan of sticky caps and words spaced irregularly. I honestly feel that if a poem is good in what it is saying and the poetic work of how it is said, then it doesn't need to be dressed up in that way which only distracts. Going beyond that, it could be a really good poem if presented plainly to show the meaning of what you're saying....so good work with the subject matter :-)
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thank you.
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FUCK this is the coolest poem ever
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It's all artsy and what not. Which is cool the
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part kind of had me lost for a second though. Pretty good write though.
<3Amy
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