Remember when, like lizards
We panted in the shade of rocks?
Now you have gone there is a noticeable chill.
The sun worshippers have fled north
With metamorphosed lobster bodies.
The beach empty.
Wading birds practise ballet steps
In the spent surf.
The plaza is empty.
A chill wind blows down from the Sierras
Banging shutters.
I shiver over a coffee laced with cognac
In the bodega
Where Carmen tut-tutts
Over her recalcitrant cooking fire.
Coke cans rattle in the empty fountain.
When snow flurries cloud the Alhambra
Olive pickers spread green nets on hillsides
Capturing last summer`s sunshine
Condensed into liquid gold.
I feel a greater cold since you have gone.
Since you have gone
Author notes
Option 6 please
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I very nice write. I've never been to Spain, but you certainly paint a nice picture of it, even in Winter! Thanks for entering my contest!!!
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very nice. not extremly catching but a good solid write with plenty of emotion. I love how you repeted the last part. Great job and thanks for the entry.
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Wonderful write.
Aw. This is a wonderful poem. It has a nice flow to it too! Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck! -
Wow. It's so different than mine but it fits really well. I like it a lot. different is always good. Good luck in my contest.
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