For many years you and
I have been best
Friends. All the thing we went
Through together. The good times,
Even the bad. But
Either way, you were always there for me and
Nothing can change that.
You are always someone I can count on. In the
End, you have
Always come through for me. I will always
Remember that.
So now I come to wish you a Happy Birthday.
One where all your wishes some true.
Filled with laughter and
Hope but not forgetting
All the other years that have made you the
Person you are today.
Pictures can never replace the feelings
Inside. Ones of old days and ones of
New. In
Everything you do,
Show yourself for who you are, and for who you will
Someday become.
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This is an acrostic(Fifteen years of happiness) for my cousin emily.(neoladyem) for her birthday which is today. Happy birthday Em!!
Written March 5th, 2006
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Don't listen to her. I hate it when people write nasty comments. I try to say at least one good thing. It really is a great poem. I loved how you use arostic of Fifteen Years of Happiness. That is really creative of you. I would have never thought of that. I just can't stop saying I love it.
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You asked me to check out your poetry.
This is the first I've read, and it's pretty simplistic.
As you know I'm not a fan of free verse, so I'm not really the one to be critiquing your work. I don't consider it poetry (though many on here would argue).
Also, it bugs me when people can't be bothered to proof read.
Check out this "poem", it's littered with grammatical errors:-
Line 3) it should be things.
Further on - SOME true? Do you mean COME true?
Please check your work before you put it out for consumption.
Sorry, I know this is negative, and not what you want to hear, but it's the truth.
Try rhyme.
Robin. -
Oh that you so much for this poem. It's really so nice of you to do that. I love it.
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