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The Only Vision Is You!

That only a vision there could be
With Dreams that would be
Would be happiness doing the moment
In time would it be
Two moments that time
Will over ving
My heart with happiness
That I could be or would have ever eye
That's for the beautiful in me
That you only have eyes just for me
Happiness I couldn't imaage
You could ever have for me
Special in your eyes
Special in your heart
For a bereave moment
Now this will always be all
All that you have just for me
That God had promised me
You are the best one
You are indead
You put that smile in me
Making me wegill and in me
My heart tells me
To hug you all over me
I love you my husband
Since you have met me
       

Author notes

A poem to my husband letting him know that I love him with all my heart.
Written March 4th, 2006

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  • Black Star
    March 5, 2006
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    i think you have some typoes in there and i think you should just leave them be. this poem just skips across your face. the language is vaguely dangerous


  • iloveyoulord
    March 4, 2006
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    Thanks for your comment. Greatly appreciate it.


  • iloveyoulord
    March 4, 2006
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    Thank you for your comment I appreciate it... Lots of love


  • Totallyyours2006
    March 4, 2006
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    Great poem it has a nice flow to it


  • thewriterwithin
    March 4, 2006
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    Hey there.

    I think this poem had a wonderful and beautiful meaning, but I had a really hard time reading it because I kept stumbling on the flow and the order you put your words in:

    "You put that smile just me in"

    Did you mean, "You put that smile just in me"?

    "Since you have meet me"

    Did you mean, "Since you had met me"?

    Those are just a couple that I thought were the reasons I tripped over the wording. I think that with a little bit more editing this would be an excellent poem.

    Take Care,
    x PatientGrace x
    Jasmine


  • iloveyoulord
    March 4, 2006
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    Please take a look thanks for your comment I appreciate it. Hope you enjoy it!!

  • lucky charm
    March 4, 2006
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    Great poem it has a nice flow to it
    Edited on Mar 04, 9:39 p.m. because ''.

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