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forgive me daddy

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I sit here tonight on Jesus' knee daddy.
What I did to make you hate me, I still don't know.
Jesus says I need to forgive you.  
He will forgive you too.

It doesn't hurt me anymore daddy.
The bone you snapped when you shoved it in the door.
I didn't mean to spill your coffee daddy.
I tripped over my shoe.
Forgive me daddy.  
I really did not mean to.

I am a Princess daddy.
Jesus says so.
Why didn't you think I am a Princess daddy?
You are a King.
Jesus says you just did not know.
Was your daddy mean to you too?

Mommie will be here soon.
Jesus knows this.
He said you will hurt mommie too.
Please don't hurt her daddy.
She loves you so much.
Don't you love her too?

Daddy, will you forgive me for making you hate me?
I didn't mean to be bad.
You said I am a bad, bad girl for telling my teacher.
I know I wasn't suppose to tell.
When you touched my 'private place',
It hurt so bad daddy.
Jesus said this was not bad of me daddy.
It was bad of you.

I didn't mean to get you in trouble with the policemen.
Daddy.
Please don't go.
I didn't want you to go to jail.
I just didn't want it to hurt me anymore.
It even hurt to go pottie daddy.
It doesn't hurt anymore.

MOMMIE!!!!!

Oh mommie.
Jesus told me you were coming to see me.
I LOVE YOU MOMMIE!!!

Please forgive me daddy.
I hope you do not come here too.

 

Author notes

"once used and abused"


for those who may think i am not answering comments, i promise, i am working at it. i was kind of snowed in for a bit and am trying to catch up.

i wanted to take this approach because i know, firsthand, that victims of abuse (of any type), rather male or female, will often still defend, love and protect the abuser.

i have received many comments which either tell me it is not my fault, it is no childs fault!! some so carefully tell me that it is my choice rather i am ok or not, i am alive, this makes me lucky. some are beaten beyond life or then live a life where ok is not a choice. mental institutions have been full of people who are never ok again. this is not a choice at that point--in my opinion so please do not tear in to me for this. i have gotten many 'scriptural' copmments. this is my view. i did not write this to argue with anyone. i have had enough arguing to9 last a life time. we are entitled to our opinion. mine happens to be that i must forgive-for me-not the other person. but for my peace of mind. you may noit agree and that is ok, for you. that is the beauty of being a human not everything that works for you will for me. that is what gives us our individuality. PLEASE--really do not argue the BIBLE with me. i could now say i know abuser's who have justified their abuse with scripture after scripture. really. that does not mke scripture bad. it makes them sick. i just choose not to participate in any more of these type discussions. thank you very much.


thank you to ebaby and ellis for making it possible to promote this poem.
i had a very hard time not crying when i wrote this. i know too many survivors who will never be 'OK' for the abuse. mental, physical, emotional, sexual. ABUSE IS ABUSE!!! If anyone is hurting you, tell someone, anyone. You do not have to keep getting hurt. There is help and IT IS NOT YOUR FAULT!!!!!!

if i do not get right back to you on your comment, please be patient. i will take time to answer each one. thank you for your patience. viyanna

i got an honorable mention for this poem in the contest which i am very grateful for as i did not realize that i did n ot even follow the guidelines of what was asked. thank you for hosting and to those who have read, thank you so very much. viyanna
Written March 4th, 2006

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  • schoolsable
    September 2

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    wow.. this poem really speaks to me...partially b/c i went through it but i told someone and they took care of it! but theses poor kids(even kids my age) r out there somewhere, maybe even in heaven, and still havent done anything! great write and i admire u 4 stadin up against child abuse


  • LittleAnn
    July 23
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    Dear Viyanna,

    I think this is the third time I'm commenting on this poem because it still deeply moves me... I'm not going to repeat what I said in my comments before, but I'd like to share a poem with you that also deals with the issue of child abuse... http://allpoetry.com/poem/5558901
    I would be honored if you read it.

    LittleAnn


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    June 21
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    Touched!
    Sadened!
    admiration!
    Thanks for sharing. x


  • AshleyAesthetic
    June 12
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    oh my god this made me wanna bawl my eyes out. The beginning is so ungodly heartwrenching. Im not gonna swarm you because i read what you wrote in your authors notes, but i do hope that someday you find closure.

    Oh, and you didnt put what i said to in the rules in your authors notes. I dont wanna DQ you because this is such a great poem, so please do that.
    Thank you so much for entering =)


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    May 21
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    its hhard to comment this, for it touches deep, its a really seriously good piece
    thankyou


  • Endeavor gold member
    May 15

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    Rosemarie


    I think you said all you need to
    and it is fine in your mind
    and that is the essance of this

    You did well to write these words

    Rick


  • serenity silvermoon
    March 4
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    cool poem sad but great good luck


  • fairytalelovestory
    March 3

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    i know well the pain of abuse. and the pain of you speak of is almost shattering. esp. when the mother chooses to stay.


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    March 2

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    It is both a sadness and humanity's shame that this scenario (and/or these scenarios) still continue(s) to this day, as you state yourself, all too often being unreported - or not taken seriously enough when reported, whether that reporting is made to parents, authorities ... whoever. I admire the bravery and openness in this piece, and hope that you are finding understanding people on this site and wherever you go, not only the scripture-screaming element aforementioned and their ilk.

  • lost.and.alone
    February 28

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    Erm hi,

    I've just been looking through some of your poems. I think this is an amazin write. I would prefer not to comment any further though.
    Great write. x


  • Evinde
    February 18

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    This is such an amazing poem. I am not suprised that this poem got so promoted because it's extremely beautiful and you can really see the love and forgiveness and the whole point of view through the child's eyes. You did a good job not overdoing the child-like voice as it is easy to do. I love the concept of sitting on Jesus's knee and Him telling her to forgive her father. This is stunning. Thank you for sharing this point of view and raising awareness for child abuse.


  • Away From the Sun
    September 27, 2008
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    P.S.

    Abuse of this type is NEVER the child's fault, NEVER. I don't care how "bad" the adult may feel the child's behavior may be. The adult is supposed to be the "adult" and in control of themselves, as well as leading the child in the right direction. Children are simply children - they are not mature, they are young and learning, in need of guidance, NOT in need of bad touches or abusive hurts. Please IGNORE anyone who says otherwise. (My sexual abuser said that my parents would never understand that he loved me that much - they use these mind games to trap the child, leading the child to self-hatred and self-blame afterwards). *sighs* Love again from one who lived (and is still living) this garbage, Debbie

  • Away From the Sun
    September 27, 2008
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    Viyanna...I have been there - as a child AND as an adult. So beautiful and so very painful. I thank you for saying so much that I could never say. THESE feelings are damned-up inside of me (as they are for so many of us). Thank you so very much for letting the hurt out for us all. Love always and your admiring friend, Debbie


  • The Drifter
    August 15, 2008
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    forgive me daddy

    Excellent--wrote perfectly--Flows all the way through--for begining to the end.


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    July 3, 2008

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    My only thing with this is the excessive punctuation at the end of your lines.

    & I just want to say that sometimes it is the child's fault. I know I'll probably get bad responses to that but it's just my opinion. But the thing is, something that is worthy of a time out receives a beating or a rape. The type of punishment is not the child's fault, that is the adults doing. Just thought I'd put forward my view on that.

    And uh, I "like" (bad word) how you've almost diverted the conversation and bought the mother in. You expect it but not really and that's a good technique.

    You can't ask for abuse.

    ITNC.

    *EDIT*
    I did not mean it the way it's been taken. It is just that in my childhood I did things that deserved a time out but got much worse. It was my fault that I was bad, but in no way was it MY fault that I was punished in the way I was.
    I would never raise my hand to my child, spanking is bad enough and I only am saying that I agree with punishment like time outs. I am as against abuse as you are. There's nothing that justifies it.
    I'm so sorry for the misunderstanding.


    • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
      July 3, 2008
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      i am so freaking appalled that you could even say that it is sometimes the child's fault that i am just going to say that and keep the rest of my opinion to myself. i am hoping that you do not tell me anything else. a spanking or time out is one thing. this write is clearly about physical and sexual abuse. anyone who could insinuate that this would be a child's fault is in need of some serious therapy.

  • ars-poetica
    December 1, 2007
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    11 out of 10

    This poem really strikes a chord with me, because my father physically and emotionally abused me for 14 years. I still can't look that man in the eye. Thank you for writing such a moving piece and speakingout against such a horrible act of senseless violence.


  • Tarja
    October 30, 2007
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    Thank so much for your obvious devotion to getting the word out about child abuse awareness... You have done such an amazing just that I actually believe I have read this before. Thanks again and good luck in the contest.

  • Tarja
    October 30, 2007

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    Thank so much for your obvious devotion to getting the word out about child abuse awareness... You have done such an amazing just that I actually believe I have read this before. Thanks again and good luck in the contest.

  • keljoed
    October 24, 2007

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    This poem has touched me in a way that probably won't happen for a while. I just got out of jail for domestic violence. My boyfriend got so drunk and blacked out. I went to put him to bed when he started choaking me. He almost killed me and doesn't even remember. The reason I was the one who went jail is because i wouldn't tell them he did it because i love him too much. He had scratch marks on his chest from me trying to fight for air so they took me instead of him becuase my bruises hadn't shown themselves yet. Ive been abuse by my own father and this poems speeks too me. Sorry to have written so much I just had an emotion connection and I love this poem.
    Keep doing what you do
    Kelli


  • Twilighttear
    October 24, 2007
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    This is really great one of my best friends was abused sexuely by her dad and she finaly told me after about 6 i helped her get the bravery to tell someone and I hope you know that what you have wrote here will help many abused reader to get the strangth to tell someone because no one on this planet deserves that kinda treatment


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 24, 2007
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    Very sad... but very true what you have said in your poem and also in your authors notes!

    There is another competition on here on the subject of abuse and I think you should enter it. I have entered my own story as a victim of abuse. I am one of those fortunate ones....
    http://allpoetry.com/contest/2374932

    Great write!


  • BeautifulFlame
    October 24, 2007

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    Sadly we have to even write these things about abuse . Although in a perfect world we wouldn't be i think bringing awareness to the bitter sad facts of life need to be posted on every big board in every town !
    This is a great way of contributing to human kind .
    This was so sad tears again poured reading as has many of these poems .
    You wrote in a aspect of what i would feel would probley be a real talk in heaven .
    You did this with grace and as much mercy as could be done !
    Sorry for all you have been through , its amazing how many of us has been through the bad and come out alright and a light to others , but like you said there are many adults that are still suffering in their minds and hearts.
    God bless
    ~Lisa~


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    October 24, 2007
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    An awesome story, worthy of many trophies!You did a brave thing for posting this. I hope it reaches beyond Ap.What a terrible thing to happen to little girls. Countless others of us have been through this too. I hope you take this experience and keep using it for helping other victims like yourself.


  • Pandorea
    October 24, 2007
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    wow

    this is a really amazing poem - so emotional. it's the closest to perfect that i've read in a while and i was reading it almost crying because it was soo amzing. abuse is terrible, but you've managed to captuer the emotional response of the child and how they feel so well.


  • Paulies Cracker
    October 24, 2007
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    awwwww this is sooooo sad and it made me cry!!!! it sucks to have to go something like this..... i hope that if this has happened to you you will find the strenghth to overcome and just walk out one day... i deffinately give you 2 thumbs up... i'd give you more if i had more... keep up the great work!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 26, 2007

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    Such a very sad write. I wanted to cry whilst reading this... I can just imagine a little girl saying this, though I don't like imagining this. It's a horrible reality that this stuff happens to kids around the world and many people we know have been victim to in the past. I hope that although the numbers will never cease, I hope they go down a lot. You are a kind and caring woman to care for others the way you do.

    x x x


  • April 17, 2007

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    i think you have a wonderful way with words. and you expressed what other children are going through you did a great job. i haven't read anything in along time that makes me cry and you did. that was sad and beautiful at the same time.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    March 31, 2007

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    Childhood abuse is gaping wound in our society. It eats many people up, destroys them completely, or almost so. I have 2 brothers that were abused, the first by a scout master, the second by the first brother (for six years). They have not dealt with the abuse, and it shows. I applaud you for addressing it; you have helped many other people as well as yourself, I'm sure. This is a powerful poem. You are part of the solution! Check out my poem Stained Glass Tears and let me know what you think, when you have a chance. Again, many thanks

  • poet at heart
    February 16, 2007
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    simple yet touching the heart.


  • Bruised.Roses
    February 14, 2007

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    this was such a sad write and I can really relat eto this...it was so sad to read this and it left me in tears...i hope everything works out..keep writting your very talented

    XTashaX


  • Whispering Winds
    January 1, 2007

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    This was very well written. So many children die of child abuse, no matter what kind of abuse it is. Some dont die then, some kill their selves as teens when they can no long deal with the memories. Some are killed out of violence. Thank you for taking the time to address this topic and for entering my contest.

    Many blessings,
    Tammy


  • AkaBaki
    December 14, 2006

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    Wow :)

    Really great, but jesus doesn't exist. Other wise this poem was great and i felt it personally. My mom abused me. I hated it.

  • LittleAnn
    May 26, 2006
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    Hi Viyanna! Whenever I read this, I have a hard time not crying. This poem is unique, the way you have written is unbelievably great. The way you have written this makes the poem comprehensible, the language is simple but very powerful!
    When I read and commented on this for the first time, I was realatively new to AP. I think it was in my first month on AP and this is probably the only poem I read again and again because it is so moving!
    LittleAnn


  • Hope2MakeIt
    May 8, 2006
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    wow!! that is an awful lot of applauses for you and they are all well deserved. people who do this type of thing do not deserve to be called humans. thank you for sharing this with me. hope


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 20, 2006
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    thank you very much

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 20, 2006
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    thank you for reading this one. i work at returning the favor a little at a time as there were so many on this one. i appreciate the comment very much. for more reasons than i can explain. vilanger


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 20, 2006
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    thank you


  • ohsweetie970
    April 20, 2006
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    there are tears in my eyes. this is so sad and just touches my heart. this actually reminds me of my older sister who was unfortunately murdered by her mother. i know she is in heaven and i also know she is a princess but the pain she went through is just horrible to think about. anyways i am rambling...this poem is amazing. it jumps out and touches the readers heart i can see why it has been applauded so many times...it deserves it. you really did a wonderful job writing this. i like how you have her writing to her daddy and have jesus telling her it is not her fault that it is his and that she is now a princess and everything is going to be ok. it is so sad that her mom comes and joins her...such a tragic poem that is so sad and makes you hate that guy. i really loved reading this...you wrote this so beautifully!

    ash


  • Legend silver member
    April 14, 2006
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    Wow now there is little I can say about this piece,without getting so angry. As the father of three daughters child abuse of any kind i find the most heinous crime, and the hardest to understand.Not that i wish to understand it. This really is a very powerful piece.
    The really sad thing about this sort of abuse is that the victims often still love the one doing it.
    The last few lines add to the power of what went before.
    It seems strange to applaud this work simply because of the subject matter But I have to as it is so well portrayed and is more than worthy of it
    I been looking though a few of your pieces while i was here and will be doing more Thank you for some enjoyable reading


  • Dlvvanzor
    April 5, 2006
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    I have no idea what to say. I'll just applaud and leave it at that. Great.


  • Summer Dawn
    April 5, 2006
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    this was really beautiful. i read it before but didnt get a chance to comment. great job.


  • sanmdr
    April 3, 2006
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    emotional write .. complex emotions of vicious cycle portrayed in a simpler scenario of kiddish words.

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 26, 2006
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    if i have already thanked you for this comment, forgive me. but if not, thank you. i am trying to get caught up on these but it seems an impossibility at times. viyanna

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 24, 2006
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    thank you sweetie. i agree with you. i still have a zillion comments to return on this one. i was amazed at the response. viyanna


  • Xxthe angry gothxX
    March 24, 2006
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    intense definitly. i at times hope that government would pay more attention to the scars that are so easily hidden, but yet so quickly known to existence. as transparent as these marks aren't shown, people know about them, we know it's wrong, anyone knows for those whom are in their right minds. this was had substantial depth and great magnitude to this piece of art.

  • oneslowtyper
    March 24, 2006
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    This is very touching, I had just read your poem "My Minds Eye" from another picture contest, where I wrote "The IZE of Abuse" - about child abuse. I didn't write it from experience, that's why it surprises me to see so many similarities with this write of yours. Here is the link if you wish to see it:
    allpoetry.com/Poem/1892605
    I hope you are able to keep the past in the past and concentrate on better days ahead.
    Take care,

    John

  • Fallenangel682008
    March 20, 2006
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    Great Job capturing the Childs Mind

    well i have no comments about god, its a persons choice what they believe in and how they want to believe in it and that the truth is you just have to respect everyones opinions as their own. But now that "the speech" is overwith .... which would probably go more to the readers than you as you obviously believe this as well. I thought the poem was amazing, hurt is such a terrible thing for a child to experience. Blaming themselves is quite often the answer, ive known this since well....i was in that situation myself. No pity please, it's im sure made me stronger somehow. This poem touched on a few issues and strong ones at that. I love how it is in a childs true perspective....for instance the first moment the child sees her mother. At first I was sceptical because I generally dont like poems with a childs perspective. It's quite often messed up in the process and if you tell that to the author, well lets just say ive been scolded for my opinions and trying to correct a mistake here or there. Eh, constructive critizism what can ya do? Anyway this was very well written. ^.^ keep it up!!

    ~Liz~

  • sashi
    March 19, 2006
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    that's a nice piece...
    but the the theme is almost on ulterior concept...
    what's Jesus to do with your vissicitudes...
    u lknow it's no use flogging a dead horrse"the God"


  • March 19, 2006
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    Very touching!~Emmie


  • XbasketballXchickX
    March 19, 2006
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    This is a really good poem. I really loved it, keep up your great writing.
    ~amie~

  • jessieboo
    March 19, 2006
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    This poem was very well written i liked it a lot but it was very emotional your right abuse is abuse and i think someone should know if you are being abused but anyways GOOD WRITE the words flowed very well
    GOOD JOB
    Jessica

  • drummerchick15
    March 19, 2006
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    what do you think about those who were abused in the past and never spoke out? is there a time to tell or just keep quiet?--your poem is awesome though and i thank you for sharing your heart

  • dark lover06
    March 19, 2006
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    wow that was awesome!it was really amotional


  • antique
    March 19, 2006
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  • Symphony
    March 18, 2006
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    This was very well written I think, it justified the childs pain and anger through the tone you took when you wrote it, and as for the last two lines, they contained so much within them - so many different avenues of interpretation - so much of everything - truly a heartbreaking write!

  • poetryisfun2100
    March 18, 2006
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    Hi! This was a very good poem! Im sorry for whatever you went through! Lindsey

  • tragediey-stricken
    March 18, 2006
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    great

    I loved it!! Great job!! the flow and wording were done very well. you should a lot of ...feeling. once agin i love it nice job!!!!!!!!

    great

    tragediey-stricken


  • Simpatia
    March 18, 2006
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    This peice brought tears to my eyes. I can put myself in that child's shoes... and have been in that position more than once. I guess it only taught me life, a happy life, is a gift much too valuable to be wasted. Though help is often there I think that many, like myself, are too scared to ask for it, or tell anyone about what is happening.
    This poem has left me speechless,honestly. Amazing job.

    Hell


  • PainAndLove390
    March 18, 2006
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    AMAZING

    wow I loved it. The words you said are too true. I suffered from the secrets of being abused for a long time and I'm just starting to tell people. It was very amazing and very very true. I would really like to read some more of your poetry soon. Keep speaking true it's working!

  • FrenchKiss
    March 18, 2006
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    This is an amazing write. I can't wait to read more of your work.
    ~~Ray~~

  • darklight-77
    March 18, 2006
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    flippin sweet!

    AMAZING!! this is sooo cool! its is very thoughtful too..sometimes i think that my daddy hates me too, i could never write like that though, LOve, death101

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 18, 2006
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    thank you dante for you comment. it was a true compliment and how so many have read this is absolutely amazing to me. i will never catch up on returning all the favors i fear. viyanna


  • dcrys13411
    March 18, 2006
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    really good job here! the voice of this little girl has stayed with me throughout the whole poem. i didnt read it and hear the poet's voice ... no, i heard that girl's voice speaking to her daddy. this is realli good! btw, how do you let so many people read your poem in such a short time?? do people promote it or sth?


  • Mascaraed Beauty
    March 17, 2006
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    Awesome job! I'm so sorry bout what happened to you! I wish you the best of luck! In life and your poetry!
    -nikkigirl11


  • HunteroftheDusk
    March 17, 2006
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    Wow this is so....wow. It's breath-taking. The way you wrote this it really gave great insight into the mind of an abuse victim. This is amazing. One of the best poems I have read in a while.

  • mindyjo
    March 17, 2006
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    this was a good write hopefully u didnt go through this? well keep up the good work
    later mindy

  • Death Angel 2
    March 17, 2006
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    Hi, I think that the poem was wonderful, and it really touched me, I really did like your poem, and remember he will get what he deserves, the Bible says so, and God never gose back on his word


  • michelleperez25
    March 17, 2006
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    PERFECT

    I JUST WANTED TO SAY I AM SO SORRY THAT YOU WHENT THROUGH THAT TO I WAS ADOPTED AT 5 YEARS OLD AND I KNOW WHAT ABUSE FEALS LIKE I HAVE CIGGERATE BURNS ALL OVER ME HUNNY NO ITS NOT YOUR FAULT AND ALOT OF TIMES I FEAL LIKE IT IS MY FAULT TO BUT ITS NOT AND YES JESUS LOVES YOU AND WILL LIFT YOU UP WHENEVER YOU FEAL DOWN GOD BLESS YOU AND YOU FAMILY

  • thecuteness
    March 17, 2006
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    wow!sad but wonderful and creative too!


  • Chain-Gang-Princess
    March 17, 2006
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    VERY WELL!

    I love this poem! So very well written. It had me crying.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    thank you

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    i know the feeling. part of the problem with that though is disassociation. for years, i saw these things as happening but to another child when it was me the entire time. i had to accept that my abusers had touched me and then i could get better. viyanna


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    that is ok and thank you


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    thank you


  • MADDIEinwonderland
    March 16, 2006
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    That is very sad and yet different does he really hurt you?


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    thank you for the applaus on this.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    thank you


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    thank you


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    thank you for commenting on this poem and it was my pleasure to participate. viyanna r langager


  • Inside and out
    March 16, 2006
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    very well done

    You have written a very credible account as a child would say it. You also have given such a strong message of forgiveness. I agree that in order to heal, one must forgive. Forgiveness allows you to take your power back - not giving your abuser extra power. Poetry is about the author's personal thoughts and feelings. It is wonderful when it provokes thought in the reader's mind. You have achieved this. Well written, captivating and a very important piece.


  • lonely and free
    March 16, 2006
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    Wonderfully brave write. Such a impossible thing to understand unless lived. I hope that writing this poem helped with your healing x

  • mordauk
    March 16, 2006
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    Beautifully sad

    Wow, this is truly a beautiful piece of poetry. The love and forgiveness, as well as want, you have poured into this is absolutely stunning! To be honest this is one of the very few pieces on this site I've read that has truly effected me.
    Thank you for sharing such a beautifully sad story, one that is extremely well written.

    I can't applaud you enough.


  • BonnieQ silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    Well Portrayed

    I recall sitting at a dining table with a group of women: we met a each other's house once a week for Bible study. At the end, Karen suggested we each tell something that Christ had done for us. When it came my turn, I encapsulated a childhood of physical and emotional abuse by my mother, molestation by my stepfather, and a violent date-rape as a 16yo virgin; then stated that by the grace of God go I with a forgiving heart.

    Karen, who had gaped during my entire recitation, said with some wonder, "How can you talk about that as if it were nothing?"

    "Because it didn't happen to me." Naturally, she and everyone else gasped as though I'd just told a fantasy. Then I explained that I am not this flesh body; rather, it is I, a spirit being, that gives this body life while I wear it. Therefore, I was a witness to the things done to this flesh body; and, how I handle those things decide my fate, the spirit being that I am.

    Karen, who had been repeatedly sexually used by her father, came to me the next day: "What you said last night. . . well, it felt as if a ten ton weight had been lifted from my shoulders."

    Relating our own stories and how we have come through them always has the potential of helping another. This is well-written and certainly conveys what most children "think" is the why of an adult's behaviour toward them. By the grace of God go I, for somehow, even as a young child, He gave me the capacity to discern that my parents' behaviour had nothing to do with me; not to say that it did not have adverse effects that I had to work out as an adult.

    Love and hugs, B♥nnieQ


  • Wesley Storer
    March 16, 2006
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    shaking

    I read so much poetry like this sad, beautifully written poem of yours. What has happened to our society? I give you ten points.


  • DreameeDarlin2U
    March 16, 2006
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    So sorry to have clicked this! I realized I have already critiqued and applauded this the other day! Again, amazing job!

  • Pinkypants
    March 16, 2006
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    Wow that was amazing and throughly deserves the amount of applauds you have already recieved and those you will recieve in the future. This poem reachs out a very important message and I'm glad by featuring it this message is reaching a wider audience.

    Excellent message, a wonderful poem and the best of luck with your poetry writing

    Pinkypants

  • Honeydew
    March 16, 2006
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    this is so sad...so many children are abused.I love the ending of your write..mommy is coming to heaven but i hope you are'nt daddy!.so sad..I applaud your write also.

  • xXcrazyladyXx
    March 16, 2006
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    I like this poem ALOT!

  • SiSiMelody
    March 16, 2006
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    one of a kind

    I have no words to describe what i just read!! My heart is still heavy from your words


  • Dreamy Green Eyes
    March 16, 2006
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    Powerful!

    You did an awesome job with this piece! I love the way you wrote from the child's point of view! I also admire you for the forgiveness that you have in your heart for your attacker! Some may never get to that point themselves, but that is a very important part of recovery. I applaud you for your great effort in writing this piece, and your great effort in surviving your trials! This is a very powerful write! Thanks for being a part of this contest! God bless you! Debi


  • March 16, 2006
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    whack

    abuse


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    thank you for your comment on this. viyanna


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    thankyou for your comment on this.

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2006
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    wow--three times. wow!! thank you. i am really going to catch up on all these comments one of these days. it is a bit overwhelming but seems to have reached so many people. thank you for the compliment. viyanna


  • AtVaR
    March 15, 2006
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    Whatever it is possible to be said about this already has...
    I can think of nothing else to add.
    Sadly, my applause are already used up...
    Or I would use it, and join the mass.

  • The Green Writer
    March 15, 2006
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    great

    Wow that is a really great poem. You were extraordinarily brave to write it and I know it must have been hard. I'm sorry for anything bad that has happened to you but I feel confidant that you will rise above what ever challanges you face. Good work and good luck.
    P.S I am not about to argue about the bible with you. If the scriptures helped you when you were in troble more power to them!


  • magik hawk
    March 15, 2006
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    OH MY GOSH< WHAT HAPPEND< THIS IS SO DEPRESSING!!!!


  • girlygirl-4E17
    March 15, 2006
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    VERY VERY Touching

    I love this poem. It truly touched me. For I too have been put through some truly trumendus things. And I'm still here. I hope everything turns around for you. Keep writing like this and you shouldn't have to wait anylonger for a publisher, if you don't already have one. Good luck with anything and everything you are going through.

    Yours truly,
    Kortnie

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