such fun ....(haiku)
all the little birds
frolicking in the tree tops
leaves dancing with them
children on the ground
singing along with the birds
such fun to be had
by Dee Garner
February 1, 2003
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Written February 1st, 2003
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You have been HOOD WINKED by The Poetic Bandits. Enjoy your day in the spotlight. Liked these two haiku you have penned here - such wonderful images these bring to mind.
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Loved it!
awwww I loved this...it gave me a smile and a pure delight to read. Thank you so much for sharing this with us granna.
Kari -
a delightful piece here, it brought smiles to my old boat race right away
i would say i would like ot be a child again but i think i never grew up anyway 
spill poetic ink and twist me, turn me into the wild lemony crazy shape of unfathomable love...
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very good
Dawning chirps of birds
Drives the bats from the treetops
Sweeping back to caves
Just observations
Of the night taxi driver
Marks the end of shift
Then he sleeps all day
He can drive again all night
Rides for crippled bats.
The most difficult part of Haiku, for me, is no rhyme.
Vocabulary is basic, and could be, the first or last line.
All in all, a very good job; I must learn to take my time.
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A great, happy haiku catz, another excellent write, well done, keep it up, nice imagery too, little birds, I love it
~Moonstone Virgo~
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lovely
I love the imagery and I needed the smile you brought to me by writng such a lovely poem. -
This is so delightful. It bares so much sinshine and light. Thank you for sharing the fun in such a funfilled way. God bless you!
Renee
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Aww, I loved it, it was so sweet! Lovely read. Brought the most adorable images and sounds to mind, good job~~Mandy
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Sounds like something right out of my childhood..or..thereabouts.. I dunno.. I just love it!
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Very cute images come to mind. I might just be going crazy.. but i can hear children laughing.. and feel the sun shining.. Lovely, once again. Thank you for sharing.
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very sweet, yes.
ah, the fun of life, no?
it's beautiful 'round every corner if you allow your eyes to see it. nicely done. -
Dee,
How did I miss this one? It is so innocent, like a memory, a little clip of childhood. -
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An amazing picture moving on these words.
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To dance and sing with the birds. Such fun for sure.
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Lovily
And so much more are we going to get.
Follicking in the playground of Love.
Sunshine is the warmth of caring
Moonlight my nights serarnade.
You mom are my voice of reason
For playing in our family of Love.
One smile or words of love.
Keep me going for miles and miles. -
awww, this was so sweet, i liked it. didn't know exactly what to expect by the title, but this was so very nice.
very sweet poem, very fun times loved the poem, very well put into haikus
kayla* -
aww, what a precious write...warms the heart!!! such a beautiful picture you paint with these haikus...absolutely exquisite!!!
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The forever fitting cliche this is so cute Dee. Lovely -tj-
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aww so cute and thought out it's so sweet don't change it ;)
-Silent -
yes, you special heart, there is beauty and fun all around us!
dear friend,
ji8m -
Dee you have this form of poetry down to a fine art - this is a lovely verse made to make the reader feel happy.
It did!
Von -
A dreamer poem, very nice.
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Ahhh.. makes me think of spring time...
Thank you for sharing this...
(((HUGS)))
Pat
P.S.
And I want to thank you for all the wonderful comments you have left on my work...
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Haiku, it new to me but I like it. Its peaceful to me. even thought i dont like this time of the year because of all of that but when i sit and think. . . Its nice it hear about it.
great work
Coonce -
I agree with Froglover here, I've never been one for haikus, but the way you put them together really adds to it, makes it a fuller, whole piece. Also, you write about such beautifully simple things that most people take for granted in their every day life, it's enthralling. Honestly, I don't know how you do it, I've never been able to write in form. Great write!
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This was lovely Mum
I really enjoyed it much
Please write more soon yes
I wish I could do one of those haikuy things...hehe
Whaaatt...Not true haiku unless nature based you say....hmmmmm
Sun dogs shake cold winds
Shivering goosebumps warm me
I beg for Spring's warth
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Aw, that's lovely,
conjured up just the right kind of springy enthusiasm I need this morning,
Thanks Dee!
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Beautiful Dee. Gave me that springy feeling. Now if only some of this damn snow would melt.
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happy little one you wrote a?
not a bad job on it.. but as i recal haikus are more to paint a picture in few words.. try more descriptive words to paint a more influencial picture...
you have done well though.. i mean it.. keep writing..
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I dont like haikus much, but when there are several of them one after another leading off of each other, they seem more likeable, more interesting...more interfaced...I love it ~~Jenn
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