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Falling For You

Falling Falling
That's all I ever do
I keep Falling Falling
Head over heels for you

Drifting Drifting
That's all it seems to be
Drifting more Drifting
Of thoughts with you and me

Swimming Swimming
These feelings in my heart
Swimming and Swimming
As we grow farther apart

Dreaming Dreaming
If only it were true
Dreaming always Dreaming
Of only me and You

Author notes

For right now thats ALL I can think of to write. I believe with more thought I will add more, I just wanted to post it since i dont have anything. The rest should come to me sometime soon.
Written March 3rd, 2006

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  • shiratikva
    December 21, 2008

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    This is my favorite by you. I like the repeating lines.
    It makes your poem really nice written.
    Well done


  • Forgotten-Nightmare
    December 21, 2008

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    I keep Falling Falling
    Head over heels for you

    I love the beggining, it drew me into the poem
    It flows really nicley which is always great
    The repition added alot to the poem on a whole
    Well done
    Loved it
    xx


  • brian180
    April 14, 2008

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    wow i love it.it flows very nicely.everything is good in place.very good poem.i like how you emphasized each thing at the beginning of each stanza.the rythms are absolutely positively awesome.very good write.you have talent.


  • starsandmoonshine
    May 18, 2006
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    wow really good poem


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 2, 2006
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    this is really a very cute write from you. i am impressed with the innocent simplicity that is so very perfect. you really did a great job and remember that longer is not always better. viyanna r langager


  • bluejeanbaby87
    March 23, 2006
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    I think this is a really well written poem.It had really great flow, rhyme, and I really liked the repeating words.It's the perfect length to to express your feelings, not too long and not to short.Keep up the great work , and thanks for commenting on my poem ~Danielle~


  • miss.misery
    March 16, 2006
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    awww, wow this is so cute. i love the first stanza, it's so lovely and beautifully written. i also like the repitition of the words...awesome job, keep up the good work.


  • felt before thought
    March 10, 2006
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    Ah it breaks my heart just to read this, way to hit a soft spot

  • Lady-Jane
    March 10, 2006
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    hey trish havent talked to you in a while. i loved this. keep up the awsome work. u are so talented just so u know im not doin much poetry now but mostly storries! ttyl bri

  • vertigo beat
    March 8, 2006
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    hmm, I really like the repetition, the flow of the piece reminds me of a song. However, it seems a bit cliche in one part (I think):
    Head over heels for you
    ...you might want to write down something more original. Anyhow, the poem was good overall. Oh yea, by the way, I was simply returning you a long owed favor, you don't have to feel obligated to return my comment. However, if you want to keep commenting, feel free to do so (I don't like saying no to comments ). Anyhow, nice write, keep writing...
    ~^~Tiya~^~

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