Beautiful little girl
Not a day older than sixteen
Been through more
That you ever could have foreseen
Her mother does not show affection
Her sister is slowly dying
Her father wants to move her
Inside she is crying
Soon she will be losing
Everything she holds dear
Her boyfriend of two years
And her friends that have always been there
Eight hours away
Will be everything she knows
Slowly she will be forced
Into making herself known
Once every few months
She will return to her home
Only to find
Everyone has moved on
At one point she will realize
This could have been
The biggest mistake
Her father could have let her make
Why she did not live with her boyfriend
Is an answer she will never know
But she has just lost everything
She worked so hard to earn
Beautiful little girl
Not a day older than sixteen
Been through more
That you ever could have foreseen
Author notes
Constructive Critisism Welcome!
Written March 3rd, 2006
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a very sad poem but very well written.
it flows quite well, and it's very clever, how you round it up with the first stanza at the end.
thanx for commenting!
best wishes and all the best
tania
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YOur poem although sad, is beautifully written. Your poem flows with vivid imagery and beautiful rhythm and rhyme. I am sorry that you are going through this right now. Just remember that whatever doesn't kill you makes you stronger. You are stronger than you think. This too will pass. Keep your chin up and your hopes high. You will get through this!
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wow. this is really brilliant...it flows so easily and runs as if slid. Well done...this is one of the greatist peices I have ever seen...really.
mike -
this has good flow...u made it very detailed tho not that it is a bad thing but yea i liked the way u resaid the first part at the end
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Great
I loved this, and don't worry about, things WILL get better. Good luck with everything, and keep writing! -
Oh my goodness!
this is so beautiful. I kind of had a feeling that this was the story of your life. I'm sorry, you know it will get better. ♥ and you know you've always got me!!! ♥
Plus, i have to come see you - roller coasters, drinking, and much more!!
i need to come see u!! ♥ i love you darling, and you know i do! I hope you keep writing and YOUUUUU REACH FOR THE STARS!!! ♥ 
Stephani ♥ Your loving sister forever! -
Thanks for the read and comment. Sadly yes, this is the story of my life at the moment, but I'm coping. Thanks again for the read. Reach for the stars!
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I love this. You have a great talent. Hopfully this is not pretaining to you in anyway... because that would be something awful to experience. Keep up the good work!!
<3 Heather
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hey this is really good great rhyming and flow. im guessing this is about you, right? keep it up sista
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When all is said and done ya got to have ya self
but this speaks without a voice.
It has all dat it requires
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