A simple little life
Suddenly thrown off track
As an unfortunate series of events
Shatter a young girls world
A sister that's always been there
Has now become vulnerable
While the monster inside her
Begins winning the battle
All this young woman wants
Is a mothers loving touch
Distance does nothing
But tear her world apart
How could a mother
Abandon her young children
Thinking about nothing
But her selfish, lonely self
They say the grass is greener
But always keep in mind
While one person sees the light
The rest are left in darkness
A fifteen year old
Going through troubles
No one should ever go through
In their entire lifetime
Life is way too precious
To ever worry about the world
But when the stitching is getting ripped out
All you can do is bleed
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Constructive Critisism Welcome!
Written March 3rd, 2006
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Ok. This is good even though you left out the ryming...but its still good, I like the way you put those last 2 lines...your really good at telling other people what you feel...
Keep it up...
Your Alter-Ego forever
<3
Mike -
awsome
this flow was really good and just remember it can always get worse so be glad it isn't worse...
and don't get mad get GLAD...hehe..i really liked it tho
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sweetheart. You've almost made me cry! Honestly! This is sooooo beautiful. Youuuuuuu know you should never have to go through something like this. I agree with brandy3, your poem does show that you need love from your mom but didnt get it. I know what that's like dear. ¢¾ and you know i do.
you've really got me cryin -literally. Hey beautiful, keep this up ok! Love you ALWAYS AND FOREVER ¢¾
Your loving sister always -
Stephani Lynn
Edited on Mar 12, 4:55 p.m. because 'oops, said show but meant get
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I can fully understand whee your coming from, and your right nobody should ever have to go through this type of life. My mom emancipated me at 15 and I got married, so my stepdad couldn't rape me anymore. Just do the exact opposite of what you seen, it was easy for me, for it was so traumatic, I couldn't imagine putting my kids through it.Your poem expresses that love needed by a mom, but you did not recieve that.Brandy3
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hey great write i know what u feel in this i dont have my mom either it sucks but yeah i like this write i can relate to it more than your others but yeah great job i liked it keep it up
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