I believe i have found a new state of MIND
As i chamber a round in this new gun of MINE
They tell me to just look the other WAY
but i know its time to start a FRAY
I can't let this madness CONTINUE
I can see hatred resigning in YOU
How about you stop fucking AROUND
Drop your ass right into the GROUND
Oh my god why cant you SEE
All you do is torture ME
Now its time for you to PAY
Wont live to see another DAY
Now i see your blood on the FLOOR
Lets see you screw with me some MORE
Your staring at your EXECUTION
you know its time for RETRIBUTION
This is what happens when you bring people PAIN
because one of them always seems to go INSANE
And then your viewing the end of your LIFE
As your blinded by glare of there FUCKING KNIFE
Author notes
Written March 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Show me emotion. Ages 13-16. Prewrites Allowed. by xkhiemster.
300 points, ended March 28, 2006, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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ooh angsty. the capitalization of the last word in every line, i dont know what to think of it. surely not common from what i've seen.
good luck in the contest. -
Oh, yeah, I know it
Total kick your behinny poem!
and we all feel that way somedays. I am starting to feel that way right now because someone at my house is acting like the poem describes and I am gonna think about the way you made the word at the end of each line a capital letter format and in my mind I will end each thought with a big yell. But I won't do it for real because it would just escalate into a bigger buncha trouble for me. 
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this is really good dude, i like it.
you are one kick ass dude.
-Kels -
its good
i like it alot it makes you think a little bit which is good it makes people think about how hurting someone can effect them in the long run and there future
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