obviously.
we poets are an arrogant bunch
we can jeer at gershwin
(too german and genuine)
and expose kerouac as common as japanese and old mercedes;
so buk liked his wine and would fuck for a dime
with hands as steady as car bombs,
each digit smelling of dried lime,
and a hopeless addiction to wasting
time
over there,
we find some straw girls in plathian plaits,
nervous as news;
a fresh batch of bitches whelping word gods
cyanide-eyed and spitting fire-water
our daughters,
always falling for men in beards and sandals
who smoke pipes and eat art in coffee bunkers
and say stuff like:
all the leaves are brown
&
the sky is gray
pray;
what do we tell these kids
who walk on 30-something legs
and laughing 60;
their cheeks like two old men playing chess in the dark
will we tell them beautiful can’t make it
and pull love and sweet from their sockets before it can be
rejected
and if we do
what song will best
accompany them
off suicide rock
something bach
obviously.
Author notes
God...I feel so old right now...lol.
Gold
Written March 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- You are pathetic by JustBe.
300 points, ended March 17, 2006, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - give me your favourites (prewrites allowed). by aeolia.
500 points, ended July 29, 2007, 57 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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What did you think
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Wow... I thought this was pretty good... Better than anything else I've read today... It didn't have a pattern but it wasn't really supposed to... Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Obviously.
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Tee hee
Dancing around madly with pixel cup -
Cup-stealing bunny!
Oh, for crying out loud!
Didn't like
"with hands as steady as car bombs," because unless it refers to some event with which I'm not familiar, I don't see the analogy.
And you know what? That line alone destroyed the whole poem. It sucked, and you are just a horrible, horrible writer with no talent whatsoever.
Yeah, right. Anyone who believes that has been huffing gas fumes for too many years. This was original, smart, and pretty true, as well.
You get a cup, god damn it. I wanted to keep them all for myself.
The nerve!
Morgan -
Is that a joke? What the hell is an "anit-semite," anyway? I don't give a damn what opera you name yourself after. If you are serious when you say there is anti-Jew content anywhere on this page, I suggest that make a point of smoking either a lot more or a lot less crack.
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Yikes. That was some damn good stuff. the kind that would make the old beardos in coffee shops tear their poetry apart knowing they really suck. and i mean cmon, quoting the mamas and the papas? what the hell, thats just cheap. This, as you know, sucks. and i think anyone with half a brain could do better. so quit while youre ahead, this blows...really...wow...excuse me, i have to throw up a little...thats what happens when i lie
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Very well done Darcy! I hope you win! I have to agree with Scott about Gershwin, though...
Kelly -
Damn skippy!
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Trust me... she never gets tired of hearing about her own greatness. lol.
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Tongue in cheek, chock full of cultural references to chew on and sprinkled with a little rhyme in the first stanza. Excellent Darcy (you must get tired of hearing that). You think you feel old...
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I love the piss take of Kerourac... heheheh.. he wasn't one of my faves at all.. so that made me chorlte...
I love this tongue in cheeky cheek plume hun... it has lots of delicious places to lick and inhale..
Yes-
I love the Plathian pigtails too.. superb..
<<<<<<< this is me... smiling
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What?
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lol...I know...I adore 'Summertime'...but I just wanted to get a rise outta the Gershwin fans!
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Bach is subtle enough I guess... heaven forbid EVER EVER falling for a guy with a beard and sandals, BLEAURCH!
In a cold sweat just thinking about it, eugh.
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Are you kidding me? "Porgy and Bess"? "Rhapsody in Blue"? I am appalled! Gershwin rocks, baby!
Good poem - aside from slagging on Gersh...
Scott
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Anit-semites, are we?
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My thoughts exactly!
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