Can you keep a secret?
And promise not to tell
A secret so deep, and hotter than hell
It starts with him asking me out
So I went ahead and said "yes" without having the slightest doubt
We had a good time then we ended up back at home
We went up stairs where we began to mingle and roam
He started to clutch me and hold me with his tender touch
This guy was making me love him ever so much
We began to touch and kiss passionately
Was he the one I wanted to give it to was all my heart was asking me
I thought about it and realized I wasn't ready to go that far
So I stopped him with the quickness faster than a speeding car
I told him I wasn't ready and hoped he would understand
Next thing I know I'm being slapped by the back of his hand
He threw me roughly against the bed
And climbed on top of me like a slice of bread
I tried to fight him off but he was too strong
Boy O' Boy I hoped it wouldn't take long
He entered hard... harder than I could take
This is the deep dark secret of me getting raped
Author notes
'I'm forbidden to produce milk'
Written March 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Dirty Secrets by fluofontis.
300 points, ended March 12, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thank you and thank you for letting me be apart of this contest!
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omigod (aka oh my god said quickly and breathlessly) i am so sorry you had to go through with this. I AM SOOOO SORRY. This is a brilliant poem though, really made me feel as if i was there, and i started crying towards the middle. I am so sorry, and hope you are doing okay and all. I am glad you can call yourself a survivor of rape, instead of a statistic of women who can't live after that. great job
LP&CG
Liz
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im am sorry for your trial that you have faced.. and it is sad that this is not an uncommon thing for girls to face. just know that this isnt whats going to happen everytime dont hate all males because of this fraud of a man. this poem was very good at getting the point across clearly.. by the seconf line i knew what it was about. I held my breath and hoped for the best the rest of the way through... only my hopes didnt serve me correct.
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You are a winner !
Hugs to a survivor of rape from a survivor of rape. The only difference was i did not keep mine secret...the newspapers and tv stations were all over my case as i pressed charges and won in the end, even if it did take more years than i expected. TRUTH always wins. -
LOL!!!! RETARD!!!!
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Wow this was so emotional it got my dander up!!! I wanted to...well let's just say he'd never be able to do what he did to you again. What a write to get me so worked up. Way to go!
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My heart is with you as a survivor.
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very well written
This is a well written poem. It is a sad and upsetting subject, but you have really done a great job in telling the story. I see your writing improving already!!! I enjoyed reading this one. Good luck in the contest.!
etherealforu 
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This is so sad. It is horrible but the write was very good. I really like your poem. Good luck in that contest!
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OMG.... this is terrible! Ugh gosh that upsets me.... so deeply disturbes me! I am soooo sorry this ever had to happen to you! Great poem
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it's okay. just had to make sure. I will comment for real at the end of the contest! happy writing!
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Sorry about that I knew I wasn't finish but I had to get done with all the editing I hope you understand.
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Sorry about that I knew Iwasn't finish but I had to get done with all the editing I hope you understand.
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OH MY GOD!!!!
THIS IS SO SAD!!!! AND I HOPE IT IS NOT TRUE AND IF IT IS I'M SOOOOOOOO SORRY!!!!
UM BACK TO THE POEM...
I LIKED THE RYHME AND RYHTHEM OF YOUR POEM, THO'IT IS A SAD TALE...
_WRITE ON_
'Licia -
are you forbidden to produce milk? (this isn't my real comment, just reminding you to make sure you read all the rules)
LP&CG
Liz
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