Curled up in a helpless ball,
Hidden in a corner against the wall,
Tears stain my fearful face,
And my hasty breath begins to race.
Cloaked, out of sight, in the darkened room,
Trying to escape my approaching doom,
Footsteps in the hall outside,
And shadows dance in the slither of light.
The door creaks in the distance,
The sound is like a scream in the silence,
A tall black shape appears,
His image in the dark is just a smear.
Pausing, he turns to where I am,
And laughs like no regular man,
My hope stabbed by his unseen gaze,
My life stolen before it is slain.
I shut my eyes, squeeze them tight,
Pretend he’s not there, and think of light,
What light? Who am I to kid?
No hope, no light… Why have I hid?
My eyes snap open, where is he?
Gone and vanished, completely?
Gone as fast as a wind’s breath,
I’m safe, there is no danger left!
Hot air breathes on my neck,
I realise that I did not check,
Slowly I turn to face behind,
And my stomach meets the point of a knife,
Shiny silver rips through my skin,
Who deserves this? To do what sin?
My sticky red blood spills on the floor,
Like thick red paint, it seeps under the door,
Fighting the black unconscious cloud,
Eyes rolling, and I hear a sound,
A manic squeal, or is it laugh?
A hyena cackling, but on a human part!
And as the cloud starts creeping in,
I feel so weak, every muscle and limb,
My murderer, amongst my painful screams,
Whispers two words into my ear…
“Sweet dreams…”
Author notes
yup. you guessed it, another one from my english essay 
comments appreciated 
Written March 2nd, 2006
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Thanks for returning the favour!!
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Hehe, me and my friend were thinking of horror movie stuff to do and the poem came after thinking about it
No problem for the comment on your poem =]
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wow, this is awesome!
the flow is so catchy and it has excellent rhyming and rythm and just sounds fantastic!
this has seriously dark iagery and a really scary tale to it. i like how you showed that everything thing was safe, then realised it kind of wasn't...that was horror movie material there.
great work, and thanks heaps for your comment on my poem
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Lol thankyou very much!!
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You really did your "homework" for this assignment. Excellent images. Very vivid and full of the kinds of dark emotions that give it great drama. -
haha thanks so much for all your comments
haven't had it marked yet, but hopefully i'll get a good grade lotsa love lil x x x x x x x x
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Okay, you should definately be getting an A+ in English class. This is awesome!!! So descriptive and detailed and I can clearly see everything happening in my mind as I read it. And the rhyming is outstanding. Truly an incredible write. Great job! Keep up the amazing work!
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