Tied up with life...
mother and baby,
unique love,
two hearts,
united in pain,
both in separation
but...
Tied...
Eternal connection,
sound, echo and reflection.
Life...
Goal seeking
along spiraly pain.
Mother...
Closed within beauty
of her pregnancy.
Baby...
Reality on the other side
of life's cord.
Both...
Immersed in their own
world of love.
Separation...
Another deep breath
in labor's circles.
Mommy?
Are we going out from the
path of pain?
Can you feel me?
Can you hear me?
Do you see me?
Do you love me?
Why I am afraid
if
we are still together
in the same labyrinth
of life?
Author notes
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ST: allpoetry.com/ Contest/185377 5
Written March 2nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- LIFE........hmmmmmm.......... maybe not by mypassion.
300 points, ended March 4, 2006, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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What an interesting form. It is almost like the breaths of relief between each contraction. A lovely entry. Thank you!
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Thank you Katie. Yes, you are right, one can't imagine closer relationship. Mother is mostly the first and th last harbor of life when we want to escape and to feel safe. It is very interesting that you choose this poem because till the end of September my book of poetry with the same title will be published.
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This is very good Sonja, you have the connection between mother and unborn child well documented through the words you have penned here. It's often the case that it's the mother's predicument who is thought of during pregnancy and labour, however, you have put the child's situation of thing into perspective in your poem here. The emotion for each through childbirth are shown through excellent images through your chosen words. Could there ever be a closer relationship?
Well Done!
~Katie~
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Thank you Elizabeth.
~Sonja~ -
Sensational
Congratulations on the Silver,Sonja!A truly beautiful Poem and loved the dialogue between mom and baby.Lovely.All the best.Elizabeth. -
Thank you Charishma for your precious comment.
~Sonja~
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WOW! This is a fantastic poem. It just tugs at my heartstrings. You have described that special precious bond between mother and baby so well here. The innocence and fear factor of the child coming out from the ocean of love, protection and warmth where it has rested for 9 months is so well brought out as the poem comes to a close.
I love the lines:
"Separation...
Another deep breath
in labor's circles."
Congratulations on the silver!
Charisma
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Thank you Abigail.
~Sonja~ -
this is beautiful truly a speacil poem i loved the lines
reality on the other side of lifes cord
this is original and creative by far your best
lots of love abigailxx -
Mother and child are eternal connection with unvissible life cord. I am glad you like this work grannyeri.
~Sonja~ -
Thank you Brenda for this interesting contest, for your precious comment and applause.
~Sonja~ -
Excellent write, very beautiful and imagery and understanding of this poem was right on..It kept my attention from beginning to end..Good luck in the contest and thanks for following the rules..God bless you and yours, Brenda
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Sentiments well expressed in these lines - easy to read and understand, mother/child connection described well in the poem.
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Thank you Di for good wishes. My best wishes to you too. I like free verse as well as rhyme. It depands of theme. When I saw your poem here and picture above I had my own vision. You know that feelings when you must write in the same moment.
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Hi super Sonja, a very lovely write, all the best in the comp, you have my applause am out of free ones but you are well worth the points, a special hug Di
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Thank you Dawn. As always I apprechiate your comments very much.
~Sonja~ -
Thank you Kevin. I am glad you like it.
~Sonja~ -
VERY BEAUTIFUL!
A truly beautiful poem that fits the picture perfectly.
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Thank you Dawn. As always I apprechiate your comments very much.
~Sonja~ -
Excellent
Oh this was beautiful Sonja, what a loving way to describe birth. I salute you Dear Queen
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Thank you Shahrzad. It was all about my feelings and memories about this very special time of unique "togetherness"...
~Sonja~
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wow...this is really wonderful my dear queen.It feels so good to have a talented queen like you here.
Love you,
Shahrzad
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