I see you in the daylight hours, tall and strong and proud
Playing the part of Ms. Businesswoman, whom they expect you to be,
But when the curtain of darkness falls, behind night's silken shroud
In the shadowy world of dreaming, is when you submit to me.
Here you are free to become the prey, the hunted one, the taken,
And I assume the role of the beast you so love to fear,
For in my grasp are your passions loosed, your inhibitions forsaken,
as my lusting soul sings for you, the songs you long to hear
You feel my manhood forcefully tear your virtues' guards asunder
As the terror in your body gives away to carnal lust
Your resistance fades as you succumb to the spell I hold you under,
And the fires of Hell burn hotter with each impassioned thrust.
In the throes of your climactic wail, you waken from your sleep,
To find an empty, damp-sheeted bed. Was I nothing but a dream?
While I withdraw to my domain, another night to creep
Into that dark and secret place, where things are what they seem.
Author notes
Written March 1st, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest: Succubus & Incubus by Mystic Enchantress.
600 points, ended March 18, 2006, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awesome!! Congratulations my virtual sparing partner... reward well earned indeed. I knew you had it in ya... lol
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Hello NeferMaatNetjer,
My goodness... this poem was what I was waiting to read. The description was perfectly crafted and the emotion rollercoaster in which you took me was wonderful. As I read the poem word by word I became that demon in his lust and erotic ways. That is truly hard to do when it comes to this kind of writes.
You penned a fantastic poem here and there is nothing to critique on the emotion aspect of it all. I loved it. I simply and truly loved it.
Thank you for sharing this work with is in the contest and for the wonderful gift of your pen. Good luck in the contest. Blessed be, Nena -
I hate being left with nothing but a WET SPOT! What is it with you guys even you Incubus'. Next time... you get the wet spot dude. That ought to cool you off a bit... lol lovely write... got my attention.
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thanks.. i missed that on the first edit
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excellent
Excellent - very well done.
Beautifully constructed with superb rhyme and flow.
One slight criticism ; the "be" in the 1st line, 2nd stanza is superfluous.
Regards,
Robin.
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