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Black Delta - Ä

stuffed the backpack
with
precious possessions
clothes & memories
her world condensed
downsized
into her backpack
thought they had

a beat
a rhythm
crunched out
punk funked
revved up
hard thumping
groove

today

listening to the darkest of darkest
nick cave sounded to her like

a bee bop roller
cramming her life
with
sounds manic poetics
pet shop tribal jazz

watching past punk on the
big plasma screen
brought her back to the
streets
to top up her escape account

watching the rollers
playing the punters

while she got the jon doe
fate of a wild card draw
kept her on the game
collecting her tricks
she practiced her craft
morticians applauded
waived their fees

her weapon of choice
a razor sharpened chopstick
which she kept in her hair
she honed it’s deadly point
while watching re-runs of TinTin

oh! that little cartoon
boy        detective
she so wanted to kill
just to stab in the heart
like the jons she did in
the dark of night

but

could not see the irony of
the mangy black mutt
which followed her home
she kept & named

AGATHA

hearing a radio
playback of
delta dawn
she learnt the words
changed her name and form

dressed in black with
milk white skin
wet lips of blood red dew

always
in her backpack a copy of
“the black dahlia”
her book of choice when waiting
for the next jon doe
to walk into her web
she never claimed to be a widow

but

professed to be in mourning
all the while her escape account


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in the stealth of darkness
her artful skills expertly honed
at morning light another
body lay in  a pool of
rich red blood
dickless
each & everyone

she kept her trophies in a jar
at the back door
Agatha    wanted to eat the prizes

but

she just laughed
a hollow laugh squeezed in one more

her watch always set to 11.52p.m.
time to start her work
tonight
in the morning light
her tortured body lay
blood red lipstick
smeared

about her cold chalk white face
she got the wrong numbered
jon last night
this freaking trick fought back
he won the fight
her life he cut down through
& throooooough

the blood soaked thatch of hair left
by her face was all of her
abdomen forensics could identify
for this jon cut and hacked
hacked and cut in blind
frenzied flight

inside
her backpack
her possessions
downsized

a bank account
a travel brochure
dated 1989 the year of her birth
a wet dry honing stone & file
a tintin video
a dog eared copy of
“the black dahlia”

inside the cover
in her own hand the words of
delta dawn
a few lines from a Nick C song
signed
delta black
wants to backpack around the world
1stJanuary 2004


Author notes

At link for Black Dahlia flower;
image07.webshots.com/7/0/44/94/22120449400678..
Book image link;
www.mcnblogs.com/filmfatale/ukblackdahlia.jpg
IMAGINATION IS GOOD USE IT WELL

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  • parntsoftwins
    January 3, 2008

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    This is a great write, I love the twists within it, and the gore was well done! It was not overworked, or underworked. Just the right amount. I thank you for entering this in the contest and sharing it with us. My fav. lines would have to be....
    in the stealth of darkness
    her artful skills expertly honed
    at morning light another
    body lay in a pool of
    rich red blood
    dickless
    each & everyone

    she kept her trophies in a jar
    at the back door
    Agatha wanted to eat the prizes

    this was my favorite part of the poem. Great work


  • lostangel07
    January 2, 2008

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    amazing!

    wow. that was ....beyond description..It appeals to everyone and seems so real...the tenor of it..argh hehe. It is powerful and just pulls you in from beginning to end. Good luck with this one, it deserves to win


  • kao3
    December 5, 2007

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    Mezmerising

    This work had me enamored from start to finish, powerful is the best word I can think of. This came like wave after wave until the end. Always glad when I stop by here!


  • still.she.waits
    November 29, 2007
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    the imagery in this is amazing. i love the journey your paint. great write


  • katscradle
    November 29, 2007

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    GREAT PIECE

    full of vivid imagery well done i was drawn into the the story you painted with y our words thank you for sharing this and good luck in the contest


  • DarkHunter
    November 29, 2007

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    Guys be warey of any birds carrying backpacks!!! That was one hell of a trip you take the reader on. I liked how this dark twisted tale unravelled and how she got her just desserts at the end. Yes the imagination is a powerful tool and you always produce the goods. Shocking and disturbing write that was right up my street Best of luck in the contest.


  • dead inside an out
    November 29, 2007
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    nice

    great write....lt.oved i


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 29, 2007

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    I was almost going to use a curse word to begin this comment.... toned down version 'BLOODY BRILLIANT' wow this was captivating, I could see this story playing out in my head in the darkness of an alley or old hotel room..... such darkness and morbid emotion weaved in the lines but it drew me in, kept me fascinated and captivated... I love the line breaks in this adds to the impact... She sure picked the wrong Jon Doe..... superb little woman of the darkness.... I am standing and applauding... I say goodluck in the contest, just tossing it in but you really don't need it....

    Your Night Whisperer

  • Colettejb
    June 16, 2006
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    speechless!!


  • aahos faos
    March 2, 2006
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    you have some real nice lines in this my favorite is while she got the jon doe
    fate of a wild card draw
    kept her on the game
    collecting her tricks
    she practiced her craft
    morticians applauded
    waived their fees

    really cool concept.

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