Slowly drifting gentle motion,
trouble lapping and slapping
all around me.
Flat calm-ocean-short-term memory.
Oblivious to adversity;
everything changing so suddenly.
Waves begin to creep below.
Uncertainty, gently rocking;
up and down up and down.
Things change for me,
swells form in front,
my path an up-hill struggle.
Rising over water-walls
rolling down the other side,
into another brick wall.
I can’t see two yards, heavy fog
blanket; boa constrictor wrapping
around me.
Deeper water, cowardly indecision is
trapping me, stuck in a bad situation.
Life, gently rocking
Author notes
I think this piece is either excellent or terrible but need feedback to know.
Written March 1st, 2006
What did you think
Comments
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mmm?
You have written all your thoughts before you wrote the poem here!
These are all your pent up emotions wanting to be released.
Now form then into a spiraled portrait, calm down look at the words in front of you.
And instead of using your head.
Now write with the ink of your heart!
You have it in you I can see that.
You just want to get it out far too quickly.
Deep breath! And ask your heart what to write!
You have said it yourself on your main page.
" I am thinking what to write!"
Don't think!
Feel!
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This is the link to my newest poem, any help gratefully received thank you. p.s I still am not receiving any group messages of poems to check out???
allpoetry.com/poem/1853161
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