There he was, the guy of my dreams
But that guy didn't turn out as good as he seems
You see it all started with me approaching him
But he blew me off harshly, if you get my drift
Later, he came up to me wanting to get close and friendly
But that type of friendly was putting himself "in" me
The guy forced himself inside my body
Thats what I get for having the hots for this hottie
My love, the one who I thought could fulfill all my fantasies
Destroyed me and all I thought I could achieve
Why did my fantasy love have to be so painful
This is something hard in my life that I have to live with shameful
Author notes
I am just beginning in poetry so I'm doing the best I can, just bare with me here. I'm grateful for the comments and critcism that I will recieve though.
Written March 1st, 2006
A contest entry
- Fantasy Love!!!!Please enter!!!!!!!!! by Patience15.
300 points, ended March 10, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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LOL!!! ....*COUGH*....*YA MOMMA*...*COUGH*
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......*cough*..... *sucks*.....*Cough*
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The guy forced himself inside my body
Thats what I get for having the hots for this hottie
hey there!!!!!. ^ that stanza is probably one of the most creative things ive read on this site.
great job and keep up the good work!!!
**LBA** -
The guy forced himself inside my body
Thats what I get for having the hots for this hottie
hey there!!!!!. ^ that stanza is probably one of the most creative things ive read on this site.
great job and keep up the good work!!!
**LBA** -
I can see that you regret what you did and it's sad.But this was an excellent poem.For starting to write you are really good. Great Job.Emily
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very well written
You have done a good job on this one. It is so sad that some guys have to be such............well, I can't type that here. LOL....Don't be ashamed. Next time don't give in to these guys. Let them take you out to movies, dinner, etc. Find out what they are like, and how they treat you before the other stuff happens. I make mistakes even at my ripe age.
I enjoyed reading this poem. Good luck in the contest. Keep writing because I see you have talent.
etherealforu
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This was written nicely.... I am just gosh... I'm so upset that you have to go through something like that. But great write!
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Thank You
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This was so nicely written yet have a lot of pain and regret inside,if this is real experience in your life my friend, I will say that you will find true love in right time,you still very young anyway, and things you see now this way, you will see them so differentely when you are older,I am glad you are brave to write those feelings down, great job with your poem and best of luck
AJ -
Thank You!!!
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This is our deepest write yet! I really like it. It shows your pain, having a lot of emotions in it. Good Write! Keep it up and continue writing!
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