Will there ever be blue skies in Bagdad?
The skies in Toronto are grey
-sooty grey.
when they aren't sooty amber.
Will there ever be blue skies in Baghdad?
The skies in New York, the day I was there,
were grey.
-concrete grey.
indeed, all but hidden from view.
Will there ever be blue sky's in Baghdad?
-for I'm sure there must have been.
Author notes
Written March 1st, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Iraq and Afganistan by SomeonesToySoldier.
625 points, ended February 8, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very well written. A valid thought on the condition of the once great city (babylon of old, baghdad of modern times). Its been almost 6 years since the flames of war first struck the city and still its not completely at peace. Great poem, thank you for entering it in my contest.
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I like the flow of the question, but i am a little lost as to what it is all about. Asking if there would ever be blue skies in Bagdad and telling us that everywhere else was grey. I'm lost. I must be missing something.
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Bagdad was in it's glorious day the pearl of the Arab world, indeed perhaps the whole world, for culture, art and learning;as close perhaps as men have ever come to creating a garden of Eden on earth.
Our western cities, for all our modern conveniences, are not without the troubles of pollution, smog, congestion and (as in NYC on 9.11.01)the fear of the sky tumbling down by terrorist acts.
In march'06 when I wrote this,"condor", it was in the thick of the unbelievable horrors going on in Bagdad and the Iraq conflict. This poem was a sigh of empathy for all those poor souls caught in that madness who surly deserved to have the blue skys of peace come back to their city.
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"-sooty grey"
"-concrete grey"
good touch.
love the brevity of your poems. from start to end, it's wonderful. there's a typo in the first line of the last stanza.
Did you write poetry or prose before becoming a member at allpoetry?
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Solid.
This is a very strong poem, the sky imagery is excellently used here. To me it encouraged me not only to reflect on the situation out there but our own situation. Very strong. -
excellent
this was absolutely great
such pure honesty
and it makes you think about the world
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A very strong write.. with much hidden between the phrasing and sublte words... I liked this alot, for it's passion and stark honesty...
a very true statement of our time.... -
hello ms black!thanks for correting my spelling;that was a pretty flagrant gaffe even for a poor speller like myself.as for the poem itself it is inspired by many of the brave and good souls from bagdad whom we've met through media over the last four years...they deserve much better than they are getting.thanks for your thoughts.
Edited on Mar 01, 9:38 p.m. because ''. -
This is excellent. I really like how you dealt with this subject. And this is honestly really sad. Just thinking about the atrocities of this world and how we're so better off than these countries. It's just sad. Well the only thing that I would consider revising is your repeated use of "sky's." I don't like how you spelled it and I really don't understand why either. But I'd just put "skies" if I were you.
Great poem. This has impact. 
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