Some say love, it's never ending
For me, I do not know
And if I, shall ever find it
Only then, my heart will grow
For tears I've cried, alone and empty
Yes it,all goes to show
That my heart, just like a flower
Can die, down deep below
In my mind,where I can feel it
The pain, tears me apart
Keeps me cold, I hear the whispers
Of the soft, beat of my heart
As the dark, controls emotions
And light, fades fast away
Then slow, give into sorrow
Cry myself, through another day
When the night, that seems so empty
And the longing, it's deep inside
Comes to cease, there's no more sorrow
No more tears, the pain subsides
It took so long, but now you know it
My heart, it forever grows
For when it's time, let love embrace me
I will bloom, just like the rose.
Author notes
Option: Re-write a song, any song! However the structure must be perfect! Including the rhyme!
This is based off the song, The Rose from Bette Midler.. the poem is completely originally written, but can be sung in exact measure to the tune of The Rose.
G
Written December 22nd, 2006
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A contest entry
- What About Everything by Thanatos.
300 points, ended August 22, 2006, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - If you enjoy music, take a look by magneticblue.
1100 points, ended August 10, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is perfect for the song..
and thank you dear for showing it to me
I loved it very much.
Joann
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Thank you for entering! Your tempo and rhyme are both excellent, and the actual content is, in my opinion, sincere, which is a definate plus. Good luck!
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Thank you for the comment. I love the song as well, making it much easier to write to.
Storm -
Thought I would check out your work, great re-write of a song I have always loved.
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Heh... I've been wanting to learn how to play the piano for years... right now, all I can do is sing... I have a year of chorus under my belt
... and you have quite an interesting hobby
SK -
Oh, and my ONLY formal training was in piano/keyboars.
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Ummm, well let's see I can play piano/keyboards, a little drums, a little guitar. I played flute, recorder, and picalo. And I write lyrics. I've even taken a stab at violin (I sucked) and steel drums. Next, I want to learn the sax.
I have a whole mess of pieces on here that are either acrostics based off song titles, or based on a song. I did a remake, like this, of the song "With or Without You" from U2. I enjoy taking a piece of music and rewriting the lyrics into my own words, but so that it is played out in exact tune and measure to the original song.
Thanks for commenting, appreciated.
Storm -
Interesting... do you have training in music??
Another enjoyable write... best of luck in my contest
SK
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cried. alone - either a comma after cried or a capital A on alone.
i don't know the song so can't sing it in my head but it reads nice.spill ink and twist me into the shape of love.
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Beautiful my friend!!! A perfect poem!
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good
Thank you so much for entering my contest! I enjoyed reading your poem and I liked its content very much.
Keep up the writing and have a nice day/night.
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