Yellow
s h i n i n g SUN
my tanned skin
I'm lying in the Garden
buzzing bees
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Written February 28th, 2006
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thanks so much. I really appereciate what you say. ^^ I don't have that much time at the moment because I am about to write my final exams in school. Hopefully some more poemes in the near future.
I'm really glad you liked it!! thanks again
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great
you're a good writer, really. you're innovative. you don't just try and write pretty words, and paint a pretty portrait. even though it's what you get, aside from a sense of ingenuity and faith. -
it is acutally a little bit too long for a haiku! Dunno how to call that kind of poem: I just did in school. Maybe just a general short poem.. you kinda jump from image to image and create a nice atmosphere. I'm glad you liked it!
It also works better when you can change the font and colors.. but it did not work that well here.. so I just skipped it. -
is this a haiku poem?
it was very short.. i guess thats the whole idea
it did paint a lovely picture in my mind
im looking forward to those sunny days... havent had any in while
oh well... nice poem
Amy
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