I feel the storm brew deep inside
As the tears fall from my eyes
I'm waiting for you
You took my heart, locked up tight
Tore it to pieces that lonely night
Yet I wait, just for you
I am all alone
Deep down, I'm gone
The rage has built, tears me down
A lost soul that cannot be found
I still wait, just for you
I am all alone
Deep down, I'm gone
Dead inside
With or without you
I gave my heart just for you
Gave you all my loving too
I can't give
I can't live
Forgotten, down and blue
You took my soul
Shattered till I lost control
Left torn and tattered
Never did I matter
I am all alone
Deep down, I'm gone
Dead inside
With or without you
Author notes
A personal part of my very vivid life...
Written to the exact measure of the song- With ot Without You
S
Written February 28th, 2006
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A contest entry
- Love Songs To Relate To by BareBeast.
500 points, ended March 5, 2006, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Wow, I could here the song after the first few lines. Yes, heartbreaking, it may be... but a beautiful work of written art. I loved it! This piece matches the title perfectly, I don't believe you could have done a better job. Magnificent work, StormGoddess, and I hope to read more of your spectacular writings in the future. Best wishes for you in the contest!
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soooo sad but sooo good too!
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I agree that this is heartbreaking poetry. Makes me feel depressed and makes me think about all my emotions. I feel sad and yet so glad that I read your poem. I can see that you hve talent when it comes to writing poetry from the heart. Not too many people can pull it off in such a clever way. I'm envious of you for writing such an excellent poem. It's inspirational for other readers to create something just as empowering to read. Well done! I'm adding this to my fave's list. Goodluck!
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This is so heartbreaking, the feeling I get from it is that this person caused you to feel an overload of emotions from love to hurt that now you just cant feel anymore. I hate when that happens. Good Luck in the contest.
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