That sheep is next
in line for the slaughter
Harm it like
you Harmed your daughter
3 Years of age
She broke your rule
3 mounths she lied
in that pool.
You wrapped your fingers
tight and squeesed
this will make
it's farmer pleased.
Hammer held
draw it back
force and power
let mercy lack
throw it down
full swing and raged
one leathal blow
per year she's aged.
Meat raw and fresh
wounds open that pour
use your hands
it's what they're for.
limb from limb
cracked at each joint
slowly does it
blunt each point.
girnd it down
her hair's a state
get the scaple
redecorate
mark her scull
shave into it
like it's wool
blood it spit
I think we're done
lamb's in site,
who's next in line?
My son tonight.
Author notes
Written February 27th, 2006
A contest entry
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Wow. This is really graphic and really well-written. I love the short lines and the flow and the rhyme. Thanks so much for entering, best of luck!
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kick ass!!
im back as i said i would be to check out some other poems of yours and wow, literally wow, that was so amazing to read, i honestly really really loved that poem, im going to bookmark it and i will prob add you to my favourites aswell.. this really was amazing to read, i enjoyed every second of reading it!!
=) ~toni~ by the way thanks for reading 'Her' and leaving a comment -
This is a wonderful poem that describes how scared parents are these days since their are such perverts around and, I am sorry that I hadn't commented on your poem earlier i was just really busy with some of my friends.
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Oh my god. that was amazing. I'm in awe. that was very deep, and creepy, and ohmigod. that was breathtaking.
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Chilling. Beautiful, wonderful work.
Chilling. Very powerfully worded. Takes the reader's breath away. Absolutely amazing piece of work here. Wow, you've brought tears to my eyes. Beautiful, wonderful work. Keep it up, and never stop writing!
~Andy
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