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Love like temper'd steel~

Ill-nurtur'd love tends to wane
  leaving thou forlorn

As summer's heat shall wilt
  pale petals o'er-worn

Thou wilt breedeth loves desires
  shouldst thou fan the flame

Love doth become temper'd like steel
  enough to quench~yet never tame...


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  • pozo
    February 28, 2007

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    This was a good poem, to me it seemed a little sad although you placed it in 'hope'. I felt that this was an interesting description of love. I liked the classical language you used as it added a sense of poetry although it made the poem quite hard to understand.
    Thanks for your comment
    Pozo


  • Sunshine1
    February 28, 2006
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    love it

    love it sis! great job like always! I am back on line!
    love ya!
    sunshine1


  • FifthDove
    February 27, 2006
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    Wow!!! This is deep and profound.
    I have always enjoyed reading your poetry
    and I love the old style feeling this piece has.
    Excellent poem
    me


  • queen Moderators member
    February 27, 2006
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    Brilliant, love has to be fed or it will wither away Excellent poem i have missed your poems