You Can:
Been down many roads in my life,
Took all the wrong turns, always came to dead ends.
But the Lord came to me in prayer one night,
And simply said to me " my loving child ".
" You Can "
Turn around, follow your heart let the life you were meant to live begin,
Walk to the end of the rainbow, reach the other side, don't let fate hide.
Go my loving child, pick the brightest star,
Show that spark in your eyes, let the whole world see.
" You Can "
Come to me in your darkest moments, it is then that you will see,
That you didn't need me at all, in your heart you have it all.
I have faith in you, and you should too,
So listen to the summer breeze blow the winter cold away, live for today.
" You Can "
True love awaits you, no more dead end roads for you,
Don't stop believing, your dreams are coming true.
You'll soon come to realize that you never took the wrong roads at all,
Faith is all you ever needed, and it was in your heart from the start.
Just let your light shine, open your heart, your soul, your mind my loving child.
" You Can "
You're the only one who can touch deep, deep within,
Bring your own soul alive, you can do it my loving child.
So blow those clouds away, live for today,
Let the warm sun glaze your soul, and dance around the moon,
You'll win my loving child, because...
" You Can "
Author notes
Written February 27th, 2006
A contest entry
- INSPIRATION AND MOTIVATION by Jeremy0826.
550 points, ended May 3, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~*~*~*~Hope And Faith~*~*~*~ by SabaSophiya.
700 points, ended October 6, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Inspiration/Inspire me by Jenny84.
700 points, ended October 15, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Wow I love the way you wrote this piece!!! Your words are powerfully and beautifully spoken God will always help us when we feel down!! This is incredible!! I love it!!
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There you go...always writing an uplifting poem and look at all that shine you've accumulated!!!! Great work my friend
~tia
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Well, I have to confess I don't have that kind of belief but nevertheless, this is inspirational for me.
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inspirational
This is a very uplifting poem for me, I hardly dare to make any comment of critisism, but if you put me in an arm lock, I would change the second to last line to, - You'll win my loving child because, '' You Can''
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This is Tremendous
What excellent advice -- so beautifully written.
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Wow
This was truley amazing. I felt so touched by this. Great job I loved it. It was exactly what I was looking for and needed. Thank you for sharing
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Warm
There is much hope and warmth in your write and though long ago I have losttouch with God, now in my twilight years I allow myself a glimpse of Him. I hope he knows that. Well done poet.
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this is very wholesome and heartwarming
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Beautiful piece very exquisite Good luck in the contest and good luck in your future writing's may God bless you with many. congrats on your to HM should have been Gold
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I have to say that this is a bit too religious for me, but I guess that doesn't matter. I still like it, because your wording was so playful or so full of imagery. Just really extraordinary. I love that!
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Forgot the applauses.
Great write and so worthy of them. You take care, Sandy
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Very beautiful words you have penned. So very heartfelt anbd so true!!! Congratulations on the honorable mention. You take care, Sandy
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This is beautifully executed!! The though pattern and choice of words is brilliant!! Way to go........
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This is a wonderful piece and even from the perspective of not being religious this piece spoke to me... just beautiful
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
Very inspirational
Very inspirational and encouraging. In a way it is like you are a coach pumping up his team to get ready for a game, and during the game to get them motivated. Also, liked the fact that you used a spiritual entity talking to the heart. I have experienced that and it is very encouraging when you hear that still small voice inside giving you encouragement and cheering you on through whatever it is you're going through. It is like having your own cheering section. Thanks for your encouraging words, I also needed them. Good luck in the contest. -
"Come to me in your darkest moments, it is then that you will see,
That you didn't need me at all, in your heart you have it all.
I have faith in you, and you should too"
That's my fav. line because it's a twist almost! And it's so very true... isn't that what love's about? I mean when you find someone who truly cares, believes in you... then you can learn to love and trust yourself too^^ All da best and thanx 4 your entry~
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this is soo cool
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I remember this poem! Thank you for entering
it in my contest. It was great to read this
again for the second time. A truly beautiful
and uplifting piece you have penned here. I
wish you the best of luck with it in my contest!
Jeremy0826
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I can only agree and echo what has already been said about this poem. It is uplifting, inspiring and beautifully written! thank you so much for entering and good luck!
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First of all, thank you for entering my contest. I really appreciate it, and I wish you the best!
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Very positive uplifting message of hope and love. There truly are not enough of writings like these that lift the heart in a world where the love of the greater number becomes colder each day.
Beautifully written and inspired.
Art -
Just reading to be closer
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Fabulous
I soooooo needed to read this and I'm glad I chose this one to click on to read your poetry. Absolutely love it & we all need this faith & hope, we can, because we are not alone. OH God I cannot thank you enough for sharing this eternal beauty of your words. You've done a great job of giving hope & I very much need it at this time & always. It's a very gently wish that has already come true, we just need to believe in it. Great write, keep your heart speak out loud & clear....
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VERY HEARTFELT AND UPLIFTING POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This poem was such a pleasure to read. So full of hope and faith. A pleasure to read this morning as another hectic week begins. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy
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Lovely work Joyce ...
I agree: this is a very touching and heartfelt poem, penned with clarity and with flair. And the refrain: YOU CAN simply ring true. I am SURE you can! Never forget this message given to you.
Love
Myra
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Love NEVER fails
The optimism is endless in the message you convey through the sentiments of each line.
The energy of love and hope is rich and energizing to what we make of our lives.
Very beautifully transcribed.
Do me a favor and let me know what you think of "Masterpeace"
AOL
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Joyce,
this is beautiful! So true and strong. A most lovely write indeed. As you said there are no wrong turns in life, just harder paths of learning and understanding. If we always walked the easy one, we would forget the wonders of the Lord and the true beauty of peace.
This is truly outstanding!
Blessing to you always.
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This is such an uplifting and reassuring write.
It's great to read poems like this. A great reminder
that the Lord is always here with us, believing and standing by even in our darkest hours. Thank you for writing and sharing this inspiring piece!
Jeremy0826
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Thanks for the entry into this contest. It is just what I was looking for. I will leave full critiques at the close of the contetst. Best of luck to you in the contest.
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Inspiring
Even thou this was written in Feburary, it is profetic of what has happened today, now with us
True love awaits you, no more dead end roads for you,
Don't stop believing, your dreams are coming true.
You'll soon come to realize that you never took the wrong roads at all,
Faith is all you ever needed, and it was in your heart from the start.
Just let your light shine, open your heart, your soul, your mind my loving child.
" You Can "
You can have love
I have offered you mine
I will again when we have tuched
Rick
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So True!
Feelings come from the inside and for every thing that happens, there is both good and bad. Dwell on the good and have faith. Love this one because it's true, "You Can" , The Shaker
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deep
This was such a very deep and beautiful poem. I loved reading it. Bring your own soul alive...hmm that is a wonderful sentence
Good luck in the contest!
Kari
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Loved it!
What a spiritually uplifting write! How can you not walk away from this write feeling good... ~Tia
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This is a very nice spiritual piece, that I believe a great deal of people can benefit from. I think that alot of people don't believe in themselves, and lack the self-confidence they need to truly enjoy life. We all make mistakes at some point... it's better to learn from them, and seek the positive... instead of dwelling on the negative aspects of them. Just because something fails, or doesn't go your way... that doesn't mean that it's the end of the world. You've got to think about what went wrong, and focus on a solution rather than the problem. Then get back on the horse and try again. Remember the saying, "If at first you don't succeed... try, try again". No matter what obstacles life throws in your way, if you really want something you've got to keep trying until you get it.
Prince
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a lovely poem; so uplifting with almost a lyrical element to it.
your words are heartfelt and very inspiring; and not "preachy"; encouraging and enlightening. a wonderfully written poem and it is my pleasure to read!
lynn -
Side Note - I reminded of those people with the "Honk if you love Jesus" bumper stickers.
The poem is beautiful. There is a lot of really wonderful imagery there, and a ton of encouraging words. I really enjoyed this poem. -
This poem is very inspirational!! I am so very glad i read it
thankyou for sharing this
Amz -
awesome read. I really like this write. I hope to read more of your work very soon.
Luke Williams -
Nicely written, full of faith and spirituality. thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
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Very well written, representing feelings I'm sure a lot of people share. There is a lot of spirituality and faith in it from what I can see, and that adds an extra dimension to the feelings represented which so many people could associate with
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well doen
WONDERFUL!! Absolutely one of your bests. I loved it. Of course i had no doubt your a talented Poet. I agree with Stone I can actually hear a light beat in teh back of myhead. would make a great song. Very uplifting piece, enjoy to read. Thanks for sharing, and dont quit penning.
God Bless
Victoria -
Wow, this is quite lovely! Also it is very uplifting! I enjoyed reading this! Good job and much applauds!
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I can hear this in my head as a really pretty song, soft music, nice voice singing the words as lyrics. I really like it. Nicely done, my friend. Keep up the good work and take care.
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Wow oh Wow, I really love this one have you not entered this one in any contest? this surely is is winner... I applaud this one.... thank you for sharing your poetry and again thank you for all your comments and I do have two books out !!!
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glad you liked my poem and thanks for pointing out my mistakes. your comment will help me learn. again thank you
joyce -
Hi,a very lovely poem ,but you have a couple of hicups, third line 1st verse should be prayer not pray, then Don't let fate hide, hide what ? here you need a subject,lovely feel and great sentiment, all the best, God bless, hugs Di
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Good
A bit heavy on " Honk if you love jesus" vamp,but overall it gives the example of light defateing the darkness, which im all about. So, Brava. -
you are more then welcome. I am very much enjoying your poems. Got to get back to reading them. Again thank you.
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Very nice and something that should be heard by many! Thanks for your visit to my work, The Shaker
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Thank you so much for reading " You Can ". It is a favorite poem of mines. Most of my family and friends think it is the best that I have written so far. I pray that my poetry grows with each new poem that I write. Thanks again for your time. Your comments mean a lot to me.
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Now, this is the best one from your pen, that I have read so far!!! Bravo!!!! Wonderful message to send the world!
Susan
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