FUCK!
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Written February 26th, 2006
A contest entry
- You are pathetic by JustBe.
300 points, ended March 17, 2006, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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i highlighted the sreen, figuring there had to be more. there wasn't. nice job.
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Seriously, though. Thanks for submitting. Every once in awhile, it's gratifying to be just plain wrong.
Best,
Morgan -
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Hey tryst
This is one sweet piece of minimalist poetry. I will admit, I feel the title to be a bit oppressive, but clearly the poem itself just begs for the reader to interpret according to their own frame of reference.
What's truly remarkable about this is that it CAN be taken in so many ways (as evidenced by comments from your readers).
My first reaction was that you were plugging for good old shock value and not much more. But after reading through it a few times (haha) and trying to decipher how it relates to the jumble you call a title, I did finally figure out that the real brilliance here lies in recognizing the versatility of the word "fuck" in the common lexicon. What I mean is... fuck (abandon) the dictionary, you've layed out this word to be interpreted in the way people use it in real life. Fuck YEAH! (powerful agreement)
Andrew
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Campbell's soup and cellophane!
Damn these eyes!
How did I not recognize poetry's Andy Warhol?
Truly, this is verse at its Post-Modernist extreme.
I feel shallow and unimaginative.
I'm a dinosaur.
The old guard.
If you'll excuse me, I'm off to go become world famous by writing "penguin" on my butt, sitting on the photocopier, hitting the green button, and then submitting the result to Poetry.
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I am the one who is complimented and humbled by your praise. I always say if they can't dig it, . . .!! Love, Tom B.
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Vonnegut wrote "Title: What Has Man Learne From His History To Keep From Making The Same Mistakes In The Future?
Answer: Nothing
The trouble with art is art and the eye of the beholder. It matters little to those who like this and find it funny or brilliant, that others can face the irony because they are to busy seeking meaning. All meaning is created.The best art is the one that creates the most meaning for the most people. But Piccasso turns alot of people of. You want critical reviews, join a writers clinic. Some of us provide them, most of us don't. Doesn't matter on this site as much as building community I think. But wha the hell I just another writer yelling in to the well. Love, Tom B. -
i guess we all judge, but judging is intrinsically a subjective process...i have seen bags of decaying blood standing next to classical paintings in art galleries...both are considered valid and appropriate enough to be there...
this poem , if you read the title, is not total quackery...it is a comment on the versatility of our common vernacular to be used in many disparate situations.
it was also written to show the strength of words in general...how they can invoke powerful feelings. in this case, it was successful, judging from others' comments, and your own as well.
it is not a mockery...to insinuate that all poetry has to be written in a certain vein, employing certain forms, using or excluding certain words, and is to be a certain length is, to my way of thinking, intellectually intolerant.
it is a poem you don't like. i can accept that. but it is a poem. i take my writing extremely seriously, and this poem is as honest as i could make it...more honest than many.
thank you for your comments...
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Why waste the disk space?
This comment is essentially a facsimile of one I left on another entry to this contest. I do not feel guilty about it.
I can't decide whether to interpret this as spiteful mockery, or a simple joke. In the absence of that information, I'm going to take it at face value. Obviously, your entry is not intended to impress. Congratulations.
I think this "poem" is irrefutable proof of the dire need for contests like this one on this website. How are we supposed to improve our writing at all if all we can expect from our fellow writers is fluffy lip service and white lies?
In a psychology class I took as an undergraduate, I was shown a video documenting an experiment that had been conducted on mice. An electrode was attached to the mouse's pleasure center, and the switch that turned on the power was placed in the mouse's cage, next to a food dish full of the yummiest possible mouse food. Guess how much food the mouse ate after it figured out what that switch did? A virtually identical experiment was performed on humans. We did not outscore the rodents. I'm a poet, and that's a metaphor.
AP is supposed to be a critical forum. If I say I am holding a contest in which I intend to tear to shreds your very best poetic effort, why do you not give it your best shot, and welcome every jab I can throw at you? If you are not of that mind, then why waste time entering anything?
I'll tell you one thing: I'll trade you every single rave review, trophy, point, and applause I've gotten since the day I opened my account for just 10 comments that truly help me write better. I want people to tell me what they hate about my writing. What if I hate it, too? What if the conclusions I'm led to by thinking about those things become the details that get me published someday? I'll never know if I never find reason to wonder. Does none of this occur to you? For those who take their writing seriously, honesty can't but be a good thing. That's my opinion, anyway.
Best,
Morgan -
this made my face go "wtf"
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Er..., innovative (sort of), but not very deep and meaningful. I kind of think I should have tossed this one.
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Gesundheit!
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Sacked Nuts!
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Hah...this is excellent....thoroughly enjoyed it!
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FOR UNLAWFUL CARNAL KNOWLEDGE!
KICK ASS....LOL. I am still getting the TITLE down...but the word? I think there is only one way to SAY it, but we sure have a thousand different ways to SAY it! hey, that was good. You can quote me on that. LOL!
Nice job...I love huge surprising works.-James. -
the site went down, and when i logged on just now, the entire title had been cut off...which is necessary to this piece...which may not have changed one opinion..just fyi
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Not sure I would classify this as a poem - not even a prose write - just a word. We do have contests that ask for only a word, but I did not think this was one of them. This could fit into this contest category though - quite unique when you come right down to it. By the end of this ramble you will be having me saying you're brilliant! LOL
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WHAT!
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Perhaps I'm missing something. Isn't this a line out of "The Big Lebowski?" -
OK, thats an interesting P.O.V. Good write.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Imimpressedamazedshockedecstaticthatyoutypedouttheentiretitlethanksforyo
urcommentsandfeelfreetousethispoemanytimeyouaremovedtodoso~tryst -
Damn, this is a classic. You know I might use this poem the next time that I am feeling Imimpatienthornyamazedconfusedangr yannoyedimpressedshockedwearyecstatic. LOL
Great job!!! Good luck in the contest.
q-pid
Edited on Feb 27 because ''.
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