Dawn Has Gone
A Cruel April Fools Joke
April 1st
Dear Mr. President,
I cannot look to the horizon
for only blood and destruction
are there to be seen.
I cannot hear the nightingale sing
for only guns and bombs
are there to be heard.
I cannot smell the roses
for only rot and corpses
are there to be smelled.
I hold the symbol of patriotism:
White stars for pain,
Blue fields of tears,
Red stripes for blood.
What a cruel joke Mr. Bush,
telling me my Johnny is gone.
I cannot see the dawn for the war has come.
Author notes
I wish it was just a joke...
Written February 26th, 2006
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SAD
Very sad, sorry for your loss, must be very hard for you. The poem is good, but did the loss occur on April fool's day? -
I think the last two stanzas of the poem let it down a bit, as the first four flow/fit together/etcetera so much better.
I agree that Bush needs to read this.
=> Jess Black -
Yeah..Bush is an idiot.
Great poem. Though it's so sad, it has a message that strikes straight to the heart. Thanks for sharing. Bush needs to read this.
Take care. -
Very sad
I hold the symbol of patriotism:
White stars for pain,
Blue fields of tears,
Red stripes for blood.
I like these lines. Very descriptive. Good job on this poem. So sorry for your loss.
Babymonkeygirl -
very moving poem you wrote. from the first line of the poem got me hooked and made me wanted to read more into it and the more i read the sadder it became and very moving all the same. very nice work. keep it up.
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Wow. You've got a lot of symbolism in here. Its really wry. Very good expression. Liked it a lot.
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good
I really liked this poem good work -
Very sad, but alas I am here to critique. I really like the first four stanzas, they flow well and hold lots of imagery, but then in the last two it loses the flow for me and is a bit choppy.Overall it is a nice poem so well done.
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Such a heart moving poem ty for sharing. Stop the War!
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Very Deep!
Truely heartbreaking but right. I'm sorry for your loss but this poem is great and a tear-jerker.
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