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Christ Son Of The Living God

*CHRIST SON OF THE LIVING GOD*
   C hrist came to the Philippi
OtHers were there the
AiR
   Impair with no dispair
   Simon Peter answered to Jesus You are
   The Christ

  S aved
  O ne
  N ation

  O ur
  F orgiveness

  T estimony
  H e is in all the
  E arth

  L iving
  I nstructor
  V ictories
  I n His
  N ame Jesus the
KinG who goes to
  GOD the Father in heaven

Matthew 16:13-16

Author notes

Matthew 16:13-16 I wanted my poem to reflect on the verse and of Jesus. I used the letters:
Christ Son Of The Living God to make the poem... Hope everyone enjoys it, like I did when I wrote it. Thank U GOD!
Written February 26th, 2006

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  • haikumonk gold member
    March 16, 2006
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    Nice work.... thanks for the heads up on it.

    Monk

  • Black Star
    March 5, 2006
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    everything as usual flows so nicely. you simply must read my poems. i'd greatly appreciate your opinions, etc. keep on truckin'


  • live4eternity
    February 28, 2006
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    cool contest, however I don't really have the spare time now...
    I'm sure you will get excelent feed back
    God bless!


  • noble1
    February 28, 2006
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    Neat poem. I've never written an acrostic before...perhaps I shall try one. Really liked yours!

  • tig19805
    February 28, 2006
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    great

    this is great wonderful job writting this..God bless

  • starsovertexas2008
    February 28, 2006
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    I think that if you want to have a contest for just christians then thats perfectly fine. no hurtful feelings. if they dont like it they dont have to join, lol! do u get my point? its yours and if ppl like it, then they can join if not then no hurt feelings right?

  • bakiro
    February 28, 2006
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    excellent

    wow....wonderful! a very good composition, i really appreciate it. it is really touching especially here in our country who is in political crisis. it is very good reflection in this season of Lent.

  • blueeyestexas
    February 27, 2006
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    I think this is a wonderful first contest entry!

    I don't understand the sentence that begins at "the air". It doesn't flow for me.

    I am sure HE loves this and I know HE loves you!

    Peace of Christ,

    Kelly

  • RoaringLioness1
    February 27, 2006
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    very good

    enjoyed reading it..a great testimony to who Christ is..
    keep up the good work and good luck in the contest..God bless,
    hugs,
    Ann

  • Libra
    February 27, 2006
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    God bless you dear lady for the wonderful testimonial,
    your faith proves itself.
    I usually say good luck to contest entrants,
    but in my eyes, all those who writes verse of their believes are winners.
    You my dear are a winner regardless.
    God bless you and keep your heart pure.

    Babs


  • jewel4Him
    February 27, 2006
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    i htink this is a wonderful idea 4 a contest i'll try to write a poem but im not sure if i can do it this contest is worth an applause well i guess i should start on the poem God bless may this contest glorify God

  • Betty Rickard
    February 27, 2006
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    Excellent

    Excellent poem...Written so well..Great job!
    "Good luck in the contest..
    God bless,
    Betty


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 27, 2006
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    then you need to have the alignment show that.


  • iloveyoulord
    February 27, 2006
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    Yes I am using the R from Air.


  • M.A.King
    February 27, 2006
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    Your message comes through well and is taken from a favorite verse of mine. The caps help to line up the acrostic aspect. An acrostic of faith! I wish you good luck in the contest.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 27, 2006
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    you still do not have an R for christ. unless you are trying to use the h in others and r in air. if that is the case, the alignment needs to be fixed still.
    C hrist came to the Philippi
    OtHers were there the
    AiR
    Impair with no dispair
    Simon Peter answered to Jesus You are
    The Christ


  • Janice M Pickett
    February 27, 2006
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    I think you did a really good job here.
    There are places on the site that teach you about styles.
    (If you want to learn them)
    You may also start you own style.
    Regardless of the way these things should be done
    it is up to you how you do them.
    You have every right to do your poem YOUR way. You did not say it was an acrostic.
    Was that what you were trying?
    If so it was a really great effort.
    Do not get baffled by long comments just keep writing and do your best.
    Well done. and the best of luck in the contest
    Blessing

    Jan

  • iloveyoulord
    February 27, 2006
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    Is this better? I changed it. thnks for your help.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 26, 2006
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    since you asked--here i go. i kind of agree with the above comment. i will give you an example

    T hou art the Christ(who)

    S aved
    O ne
    N ation(by Your death, you gave us)

    O ur
    F orgiveness(My

    T estimony(now is this
    H e is in(all of the)
    E arth(reigning forevermore)

    i put in parentheses what i would hav done to make the transition smoother. i didn't do the entire write as it is your poem. knowing my Bible allows me to know Phillipi and i think that was ok how it was. i write about people anll the time and do not get specific other than their name and i can make it work. if you go back and sommothe over the transition between lines i believe you will do well. viyanna


  • kryspin
    February 26, 2006
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    *well, I'm not very familiar with christianity, however i am familiar with acrostiche style writes! hehe

    your first stanza seemed connected but does not quite flow correctly. i find it's missing a few connecting words, unless you want it to be a stand alone verse by verse. let me try to explain a little clearer:

    C aesare Philippi ruled the region when Jesus
    H aving asked His disciples
    (R evealed by My Father
    I n heaven)
    S imon Peter answered:
    T hou art the Christ


    philippi is what exatcly? a person? a leader? not knowing what the first verse is trying to say, makes the rest tougher to understand.

    when jesus having asked his disciples...what did he ask?
    what was revealed by my father in heaven?

    see there's small things missing in between parts which seem like they should connect and flow from verse to verse, even though it's an acrostiche. some of the best acrostiches flow from verse to verse and even rhyme. mind you they don't need to rhyme to be good (and im not telling you to rhyme).

    also note the minor punctuation suggestions listed above in the copy of your first stanza, those help clarify, now add the missing information.

    I hope this in-depth critique was what you were asking me for. Otherwise, I just don't know what to say. hehe.

    thanks for asking my advice/ opinion. much appreciated


  • MuddyKing
    February 26, 2006
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    This is wonderful, especially using the acrostic form. Best wishes in the contest.
    Peace Muddy


  • Shancy Fayre
    February 26, 2006
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    I love it and think you did a very pleasing job with it. I certainly wish you the best in the contest where you're entering it. Thanks for sharing. Shancy.

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