If angels rode on Harley's
By the light of the moon
Across a celestial highway
Into a star flecked lagoon
Revving fast as lightning
Through the midnight sky
Over milky moon beams
These angel riders fly
The trail of dust they leave-
The tails of shooting stars
Travelling the galactic by-ways
From Mercury to Mars
Wings flapping carelessly
As they take off out of sight
This band of cosmic angels
And their iron horse of might
They play the watchful guardian
To the biker generation
Keeps them free from harm
Offers them salvation
O'er clouds, through the cosmos
These protectors never sleep
For if angels rode on Harley's
Spare the biker's soul to keep
Author notes
Per rules, Munchies loves you, fourth picture.
I know this is a little off the wall, but I sat looking at all the pictures trying to decide if I wanted to try and write something for one of them, and it just hit me like a lead pipe. Someone very near and dear to me, a biker, sat on my mind. And it was like, wow, a guardian angel for bikers. LOL, I know, wierd.
G
Written February 26th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Angels by burdened.
300 points, ended May 28, 2006, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I love it - I need an angel - just got my 1st harley last week Wonderful write Just excellent! Betsy/pdf
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I love it, seeing as my Dad has a harley of his own, I really appreciate this poem. I love the idea of gals riding harley's as I've often heard fellas insinuate that its a 'guy thing'.
"The trail of dust they leave-
The tails of shooting stars
Travelling the galactic by-ways
From Mercury to Mars"
I love this stanza, the description and metaphors is brilliant!
Congrats on an excellent write! X
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Thank you for the comments, appreciate it.
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this was so cool
i love it
but i love rideing
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great work. kind of makes you wonder, just mabey, the fun of riding across the sky.
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i love this !!
you don't think of things like that until someone words it for you.
i think this is fabulous. and my grandad has a harley too
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Thank you for commenting, most appreciated.
Storm
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Wow... this was great!! I can't really critique it a lot...or at all really. This was heartfelt, honest, and made me think of a starry night sky with the road clear and open in front of me. Great job, Keep the muse revving!
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LOVED THIS
Yes indeed this is penned very well I would have never thought to have angels ride harlys but if they could then yes it should be the best
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Thank you, I appreciate your comments.
Storm
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Wow this is awesome, I really like the idea of and frequently write about Angels and this is a great new take! A very beauiful poem, well deserving of the gold. What else can I say that 87 comments hasn't already said?!
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Thank you, much appreciated.
Storm
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Well done
It's not wierd at all. A wonderful thought and you should share sentiments like this more. We have a couple of good friends who are bikers. And more than once when younger went on a vacation or two on the back of a bike. Revve On!
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Storm
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i love the imagery and the pictures you portray in this. it is really well written and the feelings i get from it are quite strong. the message in this is really being sent out. i love it.there is no way i think that you could improve it because i feel it is perfect how it is. you keep it in the same tense the whole way through. something that takes a lot of skill to do well. thank you. i love it so so much
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AMAZING
I loved it. Every bit of it.
My favorite part was how artistic and imaginative you were. It was like i could see these biker riding harleys through the still night sky.
SOO GOOD!
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Storm
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Lovin it... it was amazing... great write.
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Loved this! If I could I would have this etched on the seats ~ for my papi who once damaged the road, & to my KING whom I'm certain would love to keep it that way, {grin}.. I am from a family of Riders ~ makes me wanna saddle back on.. Brilliant..
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Thank you for the comments, most appeciated.
Storm
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It's a beautiful poem, not really a prayer, but your descriptions are wonderful. You must have a very vivid imagination to come up with such beautiful word pictures.
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I suppose I do have an imagination, I am an artist and photographer, so it is needed.
Thank you for the comments, appreciate it.
Storm
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my brother is a biker and active in his club with poker runs to raise money for different community projects. i also have several friends in another biking club and it is always amazing to see how these big burly guys will open their hearts for different causes. your poem truly is beautiful and i am sure bikers every where would love to read this and know someone took the time to make such a wonderful writing dedicated to them. congratulations on winning the gold, you deserved it.
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Thanks hun, appreciate the comments.
Storm
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I think it is only fair I know a Priest hwo rides a big bike
I saw on tv a group pf jewish riders that take weekend trips and do their religion on the road The Rabie was one of the riders. It dosen't offend me. Jesus preached out in the fresh air. veroom veroom and away we go..............................mc
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You're right about that. Thank you for the comments.
Storm
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Well I don't think it's weird atall, I think this write is amazing and so dream like..I love it!
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Storm
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Wonderful description of the angels riding up in the sky. I wonder why you started with "if" since you moved into the description and never got to the "then" part. Doesn't really matter, very interesting poem just the same.
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Interesting
I thought it was a good idea to have a guardian angel for bikers, in my own mind, they need one, or even a few. The poem draws a person in. -
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With the laws that do not require bike helets around here, they do need a few of those angels indeed. Thank you for the comments.
Storm
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What a wonderful prayer. (to me) bikers look rather scary in all that leather (lmfao) but no matter what they look like, they are still really nice people (I have a few in the family) and they deserve every angel they can get.
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I'll admit, some of them do look scary. But almost all the ones I know, and I know a lot living in Floroda where they have Bike Week and Biketoberfest, are actually some of the warmest and kindest people I know with the hugest hearts that support so many causes.
Thank you for the comments, much appreciated.
Storm
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I'm a huge biking fan, I love this! It's absolutely amazing, well done!
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Thank you, appeciate the comments.
Storm
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Cute. I like stanza 3.
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I really like this piece, my husband rides a Harley, but even if he didnt I think this is wonderful. Light and flowing, I enjoyied this greatly !!!
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Much appreciate your comments.
Storm
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Love your author's note!! I don't think it weird at all! I think it is a fantastic idea!!!
And this read is just as wonderful as your comment! Congrats on the well deserved Gold!!!!
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Thank you, most appreciated.
Storm
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Yes, but your idea was awesome my friend, Beautiful write. It gave a pos upper beat and left me with a smile, I thank you. Also, your ryhme and the flow were perfect. Don't change a word...GETS
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Thank you hun, appreciate it.
Storm
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WOW!! That was amazing!
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Thank you
Storm
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As I look over my contest and reread the entrants, yours was most definitely deserving of my gold trophy. This poem has been favourited, and every time I read it it lifts my spirits and makes me feel alive. Thankyou again for this awesome read, I never tire of reading it. Take care XxXxX
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Thank you, that is truly an honor. Again, appreciate your comments
Storm
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I have a strong belief in angels, so I found this poem especially stunning. So beautiful, and way to shatter a stereotype. Congrats on the gold, it was well-deserved!
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I don't think there is anything weird about this at allI love the idea of guardian angels for bikers, and at times I think of some of them as "angels" as well [especially when they get together in groups to take presents to needy children-i.e Christmas time]I am glad to see that the stigma of "bikers being bad news" is finally lifting some. Your write is such an upbeat one and the rhyme and flow are great [easy to speak out loud]. Congratulations on that Gold you won,
reenie
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Thank you much for the comments reenie. The more I read it, the less I think it's wierd. And you're right, so many of them are angels themselves. Thanks again.
Storm
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Now that was beautiful. I simply loved every line.
Hugs, Vampy
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Thank you for the comments, truly appreciate it.
Storm
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wonderful poem I really like this stanza great work...The trail of dust they leave-
The tails of shooting stars
Travelling the galactic by-ways
From Mercury to Mars........
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Thank you so much for the comment, appreciated.
Storm
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I loved your poem. Its not wierd at all. I use to ride a harley myself. Know the feeling
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Thank you, much appreciate the comment.
Storm
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this is a really kool poem. i love it. my dads a biker and a self employed mechanic so he works on his own bikes. i always thought the bikers had guardian angels as well as us normal or not so normal people do. it is a very awesome kick ass poem. thanx for giving me and my dad hope and for giving hope for all bikers
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Thank you for the comments, much appreciated.
Storm
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I can see why you won gold with this piece. I love to ride more than anything else. If I am not on two wheels, there is something wrong. I loved your bikers prayer as it was very well thought out and flowed exceptionally well. Being on a bike is truely beyond discription in the feelings that flow through ones mind and body. Thanks for putting this poem for all to enjoy..
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Thank you for your comments, very much appreciate it.
Storm
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You've put a wonderful and slightly eccentric image in my head. Lol. This is nicely written, with poweful imagery and grand vocabulary. Congrats on your gold trophy, dear poetess. I wish you all the best, Zach.
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Thank you kindly for the comments, much appreciated.
Storm
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Awesome
Amazingly well written, buddy! I'm not religous by any stretch (despite what my pic may show), but this was really neat. It almost sounds like lyrics to a Judas priest or Iced earth song, and to me, that's a good thing. Write on, buddy!
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Thank you for the comments, appreciate it. Nothing wrong with sounding like a Judas Priest song
Storm
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Subtle yet great
It has a subtle ring to it and it is complimented by vivid pictures conveyed through wisely chosen words. It possesses a dream like quality that I like very much. It also sheds light on an often misunderstood lifestyle, and because of that a bit of prejudice left my soul. The poem made me realize that they are people too and we all need to be safe as we go no our daily lives. This is a great write! Keep on writing!
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment, appreciate it.
Storm
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Good Write
I failed to see any metre' pattern kjd however, this is a superior write. Tells a great story of an un-understood lifestyle - if one has the capacity to interpret.
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Thank you for the comments. You failed to see any meter to this as there is none. I don't write in any given form or style and meter is not something I always pay attention to. I write what comes to mind. Thanks again.
Storm
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Riding Free
...with superb imagery, meter and rhyme! Well done!
~Karla.
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Storm
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That was amazing. I know my granddad would hold it proud as I hope he's one of the angels riding on Harley's. This poem really reminded me of himand you covered the view of a heaven like place perfectly. I'd like to believe that you go to heaven and are among those with likes like your self. Your poem is inspiring and an honor to all bikers.
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Thank you for your time and comments. An honor when someone admits they read and reread a piece. And I would be honored if you printed it and passed onto your fellow biker.
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I love this and it is a well deserved gold trophy, it flowed so beautifully and the rhyme was perfect, well done on this piece
Karen
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Thank you Karen, truly appreciate your comments.
Storm
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this is excellent. I loved it. wonderful rhyming flow. and wouldn't it be great it there was something of the sort. a biker angel that is so cool. kep writing
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Storm
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I like it
you open with stong images
a lagoon added color to the dark
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Storm
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excellent i have a biker family and i read them this and we all love it!!
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Thank you for the comments, glad you all enjoyed.
Storm
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