Blood on white tiles
A chopped leg
Two pounds please
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recently at the butcher
Written February 25th, 2006
What did you think
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funny
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well, when I read it in class everybody laughed so it is rather funny ^^ it just depends on how you read it!!!
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I don't know whether or not you meant to be so funny but you really made me laugh. Well done and keep up the good work
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thanks for that reply. I did not really see it that way. I just went to the butcher and I wrote that because it was a terrible picture for me.. It was so sad, destorying, awful and yet somehow beautiful. But I like the way you interprete this one. It makes also very much sense.. It is interesting what people think about such a short Haiku.. I just wrote it in like 15min and did not know that it had such a deep impact. Thanks for your comment again! Opened my eyes.
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you know.these few words say sooo much.The way you kept it so short gave it a bigger impact.this was like a piece of philosophy,it really made you think.i read into it in a way that people are infatuated by pain,people pay to see blood shed whether its boxing,war or a kinky dvd.it makes me think of people who are experiencing real pain,real bloodshed and yet are not being taken seriously
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Please explain to me how I should relate, so I can find your vision here. -
heh, cool. I normally am not one for haiku, but this one is especially intriguing to me. So much imagery in only 10 words.
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thanks a lot
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mm tasty! lol great write.
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Butcher's haiku.... mmmm like it.
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That last line took it to the top - well written - more of a senryu I think - dealing with human nature, rather than nature. Lovely modern version.
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hehe thanks anyway ^^ ya, Haikus are in general very short ^^
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haha i was expecting something totally different, and something longer...i guess inspiration come from all places
and me im not at all familar or good with hikus but uh so ya i donno if its good good or not, its short...srry i cant be of more help
Autumn
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thank you!
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wow this is awesome. even with just a few words i can see an picture in my head already. bravo
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Thank you very much! That's why I like Haikus! It's short, precise and ..... imagine!
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That was unexpected, yet good. I liked what you said in just a few words. And it sort of has a twist at the end because of the last line. You think it's going to go one way and then it goes another. Very nice. I think it's cool how you can be inspired by almost anything in the world. Great write. -R.T
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