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Be the Difference (Haiku)

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Do something today
To bring a smile to someone
Who just needs a friend

A simple smile
Can give hope to the despaired;
The light of their day

Give a friendly hug
To someone who is crying
Wipe away their tears

Start the change right now
Make a difference for them,
Go against the flow

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Author notes

This is my first haiku poem so don't be too harsh. I know most haiku's are just one stanza, but I figured this would seem better with four haiku's in one poem. I really don't like having to count syllables or any of that so this was a tough challenge for me. Oh well, at least I can say that I've actually written one now.
Written February 25th, 2006

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  • KaseyL
    February 26, 2006
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    There is another form of "Haiku" it's called a "Tanka" the real way to do it is : 5-7-5-7-7 ...I believe it's that, a five line Haiku bit. Annd plus Haiku's..their definition is not the 5-7-5. They are supposed to be..shown and not told, usually used for Nature etc. (of course that's besides the point) and you are just supposed to have more syllables in the second line than the two above and below it.

    Now that you know the little.....informational piece I felt like sharing, you may know how I felt.

    This was inspiring....this makes me just want to smile to as many people as I can (which I do anyway). Great job..you are just a great poet, and a great person at heart.


  • black mystic
    February 26, 2006
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    this is is really striking because trough this poeme you can tell that you want to make a diffrence and that you want other people to too and i just think thats amazing of you because telling someone strait up that they should try to make a diffrence in the world today is really affective ....
    the fact that you want people to help others even with small gestures...
    you can tell how sincere you are in this poeme
    great work!!


  • Master-Mush
    February 26, 2006
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    and u've been the difference in mane lives dear...and hopefully u shall b in the future
    this is amazing...cant b asked to count the sylables so i wont see if u got it all down...but as far as the poetry behind it...lovely. just amazing. keep it up !!

    mushy


  • FireyAura
    February 25, 2006
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    hey, this is really good! I loved it. I find the same thing true. Every now and then when someone just out of the blue comes up and hugs me, it really makes my day. Great job! Oh and in case your having a bad day, ,

    ~*Chelsea*~


  • Sharcu silver member
    February 25, 2006
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    Thank you for your comment About being inspired - it was inspired by the fact that several people on Thursday and Friday just smiled at me in the hall. They were just random people that I didn't even know, but it really helped me get through the day. Then I was in the shower and thought of the first stanza I know, I get inspired in weird ways and in weird places. Thanks again for your comment!
    --Tim

  • fish airways
    February 25, 2006
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    meanigfull!

    well done! it's actually quite good, and very meaningfull. i don't honestly know the definition of a haiku, i thought it was one of those five line poems that have a certain rhythm to them and the first two lines and last, rhyme, and then the two left in the middle rhyme. so i was kind of surprised, as well as impressed! was this written for a friend or something because it is kind of inspiring. thanks. keep up the good work!

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