the still tundra
knows that I am God
for buds are birthed
Author notes
Some of the most powerful obstacles are removed in the "winters" of our lives. I am so thankful that the spring is almost here.
"My beloved spake, and said unto me, Rise up, my love, my fair one, and come away.
For, lo, the winter is past, the rain is over and gone;
The flowers appear on the earth; the time of the singing of birds is come, and the voice of the turtle is heard in our land.." Song of Solomon 2:10-12
Again, I took this with my Canon a95. I took a series of photos for a panarama of the view from my daughters deck. But I cropped the photo to capture this one tree and treeling.
I took this photo last week in Bakersfield VT. Please do not use without my knowledge.
Written February 25th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Closes in Ten Minutes! by peperminty889.
450 points, ended February 25, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Winter Rounds Contest - 1 by amaranthine lover.
600 points, ended January 9, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I like the simple phrase "knows that I am God"
blunt and lovely thanks for entering
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says it all...in three lines! thanks for entering, cookies for a amazing poem!
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Excellent Writing
God is the source of all Creation played out in myriad forms through time -- itself an element of His Creation. Outside of this, His Creation, lie timeless dimensions of perfect existence lived in spiritual, immaterial forms of light of our forms here, but in glorified bodies as how Peter, James, and John saw Jesus talking with Elijah and Moses on the Mount of Transfiguration... --Ellis -
good framing decent shot but alas there's far too many nature/ sunset/ forest pictures similar to the last...
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thelordreigns ---
Thank you so much for entering my contest.
First off, wonderful job on this picture. I'm into photography, and the best pictures are always taken with nature. This haiku was beautiful, I think you did snow and winter justice. I loved it 
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn."
Thank you for entering.
Good Luck in the contest,
Take Care,
x PatientGrace x
Jasmine
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I like the imagery in this. In L2, the word "still" is not really required because in L1 you have already conveyed that Tundra is "frozen". So, still is another sort of repetitive word which says much the same thing as the image which frozen puts forth. Nice picture there.
Goodluck,
Charishma
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i love this it's so so good i cant find words to discribe it!
but i'll try the nature is told though senses and i think that's what really makes the poem oh and thanks for commenting on my poetry -
Flawless
And, Joanne is a talented photographer as well as a poet! The photo is in perfect balance and absolutely perfect for this haiku; which, by the way, flawlessly reveals the beauty of winter moving into spring: despite a different meter, it works perfectly! So, I declare this should be the gold winner. If it isn't, you just let me know and I tell our Father. He will know precisely what to do about it.
Love and hugs, B♥nnieQ
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So simple, so meaningful, so enlighting
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I enjoyed your haiku very much. It enriched my day with a lovely image and a thought to ponder.
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My beloved spake, and said unto me, Rise up, my love, my fair one, and come away.
For, lo, the winter is past, the rain is over and gone;
The flowers appear on the earth; the time of the singing of birds is come, and the voice of the turtle is heard in our land.." Song of Solomon 2:10-12
in the Bible, i love it when the rain is used to describe our lives. the former and latter rain. you did an awesome job on this write but i wanted to comment on that verse. i admire the ability you have to say so much with so few words. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna r langager -
I like this. Much like everyone else, I've seen a good deal of clumsy haiku, which this is not. I'm fond of the contrast between the first two lines and the third, the shift that gives haiku its lovely subtle motion. It's very well done. Also, I love the way that you've put mostly sibilant and labial consonants in the first two lines, which makes the wealth of b's in your last line sound percussive and alive in comparison. It really energizes the haiku. Nice job!
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I think even without the picture, this sparks up a great deal of imaginary to the readers. So suggestively, you might want to consider dropping the picture altogether beacuse it's in a way playing the role of the back stagehand
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beautiful
It's pretty difficult to find a REALLY good haiku, and I thought this one was brilliant. I really liked the picture too,it fit so nicely.it was very wel worded and thought out write on! -
Pretty... =)
Ooh! That's so pretty. The picture is pretty too. -lol- I like it. Great job. Goodluck in the contest. -
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I like the way you describe the visual and then end with what is beneath the surface of what we see. It speaks of the bleakness of winter but the promise that under all of it spring is in the making.
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I too prefer the 5-7-5 and teach it strictly to my English students. But sometimes it just feels right to shorten the lines. I have seen such skillfully written shorter haiku on AP and I admire the craft. Thanks so much for the read and the comment. Blessings from CT - joanne
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a marriage of the visual and the written word, both intensely succinct, subtle and beautiful. i also enjoyed the reference to Songs of Solomon. thank you for the calming pause this gave to my day. ~tryst
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This is so beautiful! This is a wonderful example of a haiku. Stunning imagery as well. Great job!
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Firstly, there is something so right about that photograph. There are times of the year when you can find a spontaneous image - this one is monochrome by accident rather than by the technology involved, and it is simple, and it calls up a seasonal feeling and an emotion. It is almost a haiku in itself.
Now to the verse. I am a stickler for 5-7-5 myself, because of the challenges it raises. Having said that, I recognise that a shorter arrangement can, in some cases, turn out a truer haiku. I do like this one, though there is something in the back of my mind which makes me feel it is somehow inverted. I can't explain it better than that. Importantly, it leaves me with a feeling, and a transient one at that. Good! -
Excellent
Well done, good luck in the contest! You do the form justice. Excellent job!
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