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21st Floor Is No More

Where our oral experience began.

Is now an empty hole.

No more carpet, not even paint on the walls.

This special room of ours  is now what you may

call "nothing at all".

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Where we spent an hour and a half pleasing one another, is being made over. (whew am I glad to have shared our experience there.)

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Now all that is left are the memories we shared on the 21st floor. No more coffee, no more candy.
 By all means no more fun and serious conversation.

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When this floor is done with its make over.
I will be able to walk along the hallway with great memories that we shared.
Most of all what happened on November 10, 2005.
(you know, the day I saw the stars sparkle in your eyes.)

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That special room of ours will be occupied by someone else.
(Just think, they won't even have a clue about what happened in that room.)

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We shared tears and we shared laughter on the 21st floor.
It was my pleasure getting to know you there.
The 21st floor is no more for you and I, but as I eventually walk along the halls I will cherish the memories we created for a lifetime.

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Yvonne J. Griffin
2/24/06

Author notes

The firm where I work is taking over the 21st floor in our building.. the contractors have gutted it out to fix it the way the firm chooses for it to be.

My friend and I shared some fond memories while that floor was vacant.

Yvonne
Written February 24th, 2006

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  • JaysonBaby
    March 6, 2006
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    good

    hey that is really good. I think that you put a lot of emotion in it. Really good keep up the good work

  • pozo
    February 25, 2006
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    Good poem it seemed quite sad but it had a tinge of hope to it Keep writing, I liked the personal feel of this Good use of brackets Nice italics and bold Nice use of alliteration Nice use of enjambment
    Thanks for your comment
    All the best
    Pozo


  • macandrew
    February 24, 2006
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    This has some wonderful thoughts in it for me. Specifically those imaginary rooms in my head where I store special moments. No renovations there (I hope)

    John