Shes dressed in white again
So radiant, so becoming
Shes smiling at me again
As she injects me, numbs me
This is who I want, this is who I need
Someone to relieve me
Someone to bleed me
This is who I want, this is who I need
Someone to believe me
Someone to release me
Its all I want...
The needle breach's me again
Filling me, releasing me
My vision is a blur again
As she leads me, deceives me
Is this what I want? Is this what I need?
Something to distract me
Something to numb me
Is this what I want? Is this what I need?
Something to fill me
Something to distill me
Is this what I want?
Now today shes dressed in black
Crying, denying
Shes looking at me again
With such sorrow, such regret
Roses cover me
As men march me
To where I will forever lye
To where I'll never have to see her cry
Its what I want...
Its all I could ever want...
Author notes
This is a poem/song is about my old addiction to heroin...I have been clean now for 5 months now and I am very proud of that...
Written February 24th, 2006
A contest entry
- ~Addictions~ by SimplyKayla.
420 points, ended June 18, 2006, 17 entries
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Wow, such a powerful write.
Congratulations on staying clean.
I also had a addiction a while back, not to heroin but, to cutting and that was hard enough to break. Also haven't cut for five months. I can never imagine what that must have been like for you...
As far as the poem itself, I loved the fact that you compared it to a woman. So seductive and that's why you wanted "her" then she was the death of you in the end. So captivating and brilliant, yet heartbreaking and hurtful.
We women can be that way sometimes, I assume.
Wow this was a long comment. xD
Keep up the great writes and your music is really awesome. I'll try and add you later on tonight if I get a chance. Supporting smaller bands is my thing. ^_^
~ms.dos
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well thank you. I'm glad you liked both the music and the write! And I'm glad your clean on cutting! I also used to be addicted to that. Its not easy to quit. Thats great that you decided to stop!
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This was damn good. What genre is your band? Do you write songs for them? I used to be in a death metal band - guitar and lead vocals- but they mostly did Bodom covers wich annoyed me and I left after a year. You should write more lyrics!! - I have this strange fantasy of performing them , I already added riffs for these lyrics in my head. That's my silly addiction, my silly blonde mind. Excellent write and well done.
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Thats cool that you can do guitar and vocals! My guitarists always mess up when they try to do both lol. So That takes talent
. But yeah I write some of the lyrics but not all of them. Just whatever works. And the genre is probobly like goove/metal I guess. We never really talked about it 
. But yeah I do the same thing with lyrics! Only instead of riffs I always have a beat for it.
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Wow. This is incredibly powerful. Very well done! My hat's off to you! Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!
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thank you for the compliment...very much appreciated...and I'm glad you enjoyed my poem...have fun judging!
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glad to hear u r clean now... Great Write!!! <3
so much emotion... it almost lets us know why you stopped the addiction
ayone who read this piece should look at addicts in a new way. i know i will. maybe i'll show my friend who's tryin to clean up. he could really use the views u show in this...
but again, great write!! <3 ur quite talented ^-^
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thank you so much for the compliment...its very much appreciated...as for your friend...I wish him the best of luck in getting clean...its not easy at all...but once you are no longer dependant on it, it feels amazing. Just tell him to not get discouraged...there are slip ups but as long as he is serious about it then it is possible...and again thanks for the comment
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its sad that you were once addicted but its GREAT that you stopped and are now clean, YOU SHOULD BE VERY FUCKING PROUD lol! sorry im happy 4 u
great poem and i loved the details used. "The needle breach's me again
Filling me, releasing me
My vision is a blur again
As she leads me, deceives me" this is my fav part. good job
xoxo- christina
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thank you...I am very fuckin proud ...I think I'm happiest I'm off of it out of anyone...those were some dark times...but yeah...thank you for the comment
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you are very welcome
i bet you are. awwww np
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Amazing Write
It looks like you took a step back & saw your life from a new perspective & saw the end of the road you were on and decided to turn somewhere in time to salvage what's left of your time before it was too late. I see it in the poem, very clear message. I'm glad you kicked the addiction, I wish you the best in staying clean. I've had my own addictions in the past so I can understand it's hard to break away from them. It takes a lot of will power & it's always good to have people that support you around. I liked the poem & thought it was great. Keep on writing & stay clean.
~~best wishes always
----Jeff
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i love this poem not only because of the fact i could read it without getting bored lol but because its true for the most part. good job on staying clean that long!
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WONDERFUL POEM!!
I REALLY ENJOYED THIS POEM OF YOURS,IT IS SO BEAUTIFUL&POWERFUL!!!
GOOD LUCK STAYING SOBER,XOXO!!
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Great,especially how you play with the words,really catchy poem.
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Ooooh wow you definately get that feeling of it being something addicting, right from the beginning. I like how in the beginning she was in white then at the end black. Kind of shows she was something you thought was pure in the beginning then in the end you realised it was bad. Excellent written and well done for being clean for so long. <33333
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That was amazing!!!! Great write thanks for sharing!!! P.S. I am also very proud of you for being clean for 5 months.
Keep it going!
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Wow. What a piece that you have written here today! I like it! Even before I read your author notes I could tell that it was most likely about a drug addiction by the way that you worded it. It sounds like it was a very hard struggle but your words and the feelings that I picked up. It's great to see that you were strong enough to set yourself free of this addictions. Good for you! I think that you've done a good job of expressing yourself here. So thanks for featuring this so that we all had a chance to share your words and feelings with you today!
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a very powerful piece
i know this addiction all to well
bravo to you for getting clean
i myself have been clean for 9 years
ty for sharing this
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whoa this was great. and it's good ur not takin it anymore. i've known ppl who've taken it...it wasnt good...anyways this was great. thanks for sharing and good luck in that contest!
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know how it feels..ya couldn't have said it better..been clean for over an year now nd growing stronger..gud luck to you too wid everything
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Wow. Very powerful piece. Heroin has never been an addiction to me but I know how it feels to go from "I want it I want it" to "I don't want it, I don't need it" but in muh case I usually do it anyways. But thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest and in life.
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Wow.. What in the world were you talking about here? Literally someone or something?? Heroine is what I assumed but I could be wrong..
I really enjoyed reading this poem.. I wanted to read more but this ending was perfect..
It's interesting how you go from 'This is who I want, this is who I need' to 'Is this what I want? Is this what I need?'.. And going from wearing white to black.. the morning after?? I can relate to this poem in all sorts of ways.. from drugs, to blood.. to people..
Amazing written. Keep writing..
skitza
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wow some strong words, i msu tsay this a great piece, a little repetitive, but it works with this poem. wornderful job.
*fiona*
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