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Effigy


              Effigy

              Sometimes
              I hold a wooden effigy
              of you and pray.

              How come it always
              looks the same;
              your unknown face,
              long hair and beard,
              and too pale skin?

              Your features, finely carved
              in olive wood;
              a sturdy little log with
              perfect woodworm holes
              and flaking bark.

              I stare into your
              all seeing, unseeing eyes
              and wonder...

              If you employed
              the sculptor's hand,
              and why...

              sometimes
              I need to hold an effigy
              of you to help me pray.




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Written February 24th, 2006

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  • Thathom
    March 1, 2006
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    That's quite different your you. It doesn't have the usual louiloui charm BUT it's very open and meaningful. I sense something has happened recently to have morphed your mind a little into a new direction of thinking what is it??

    Of course this is about christ and also about the lack of strength in the holder of the effigy. For they need something to cling to to keep them strong


  • leo2
    February 26, 2006
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    The first thing to come to mind is the effigy is Christ. Isn't it ironic that the symbol of the crucifixion, a horrible specter still, is the essence of our faith and salvation.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • loualoui
    February 26, 2006
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    Thanks Jane... I do actually have an alternative for that line... I couldn't decide which way to go with it... maybe I'll try the other one again... it does read a little more smoothly.

    Thanks for reading and commenting. Hope you're well!

    xx


  • bridgetjanejone
    February 25, 2006
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    excellent!

    Wow! Great... the only line that doesn't flow, for me, is "that you first carved..." dunno that's not quite right but I love the originality and depth to this.


  • morningstar1948 gold member
    February 24, 2006
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    good write

    This is a good poem. You did a great joy on chooseing you words. Great job

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