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Cotton Eyes

Missing image

 

 

 

Cotton eyes
wrapped in cellophane
navigating the scribbles of my mind.

 

Your eyes... 

 

Dissonance and harmony
spin wildly between us
sparring
dancing in vulnerable, candid navigations
that hungrily explore
and map the other’s symmetries...

 

Eyes, drinking  
an alcoholic stimuli 
the potency reiterated 
by obeyingly parted lips moistened
where the eyes inevitably and slavishly fall.

 

Candy eyes.
Puffy. Creamy. Spilling out, over me.
I spill back at them
in a sweet out-of-focus haze.

 

We then close our eyes
and our hearts bloom,
intertwind...


a lingering image of cotton eyes
burning hot in imaginings...

 

Eyes.
Serenade with colors
deep, dark-set.
Cotton eyes.

 






inspiration and much aid derived from:
Virtual Muse #19: Eyes by lavender shadows
 

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Written February 24th, 2006

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  • wbiro gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    thanks for reading and commenting Susan, and welcome to AP!


  • wbiro gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    thanks, sis... so you liked 'reiterate'... hmmm... I was wondering about that word...!

  • wbiro gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    No, Lord E, I haven't heard of them, and to think they're right here under my nose! Glad the title drew you in, anyway!


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    Take it back - have heard of the song Cotton Eyed Joe - a fast paced foot stomper for sure. Must be where the alcoholic eyes come from - LOL.


  • lavender shadows
    February 25, 2006
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    lol! I hadn't even thought of "Cotton Eyed Joe"... which is funny because a friend and I have a joke about that song.

  • wbiro gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    well, granny, then you've never heard of the Red Nex and their song called 'Cotton Eyed Joe'! (see previous commenter!)

  • grannyeri gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    Interesting look at eyes - never thought about them in this frame of reference before - cotton eyes - great images you have penned here.


  • Diamondeyes
    February 25, 2006
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    Absolutely beautiful! I love the imagery. It's perfect.
    <3 Laura


  • whispersoftly
    February 25, 2006
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    this is a pretty write bro and the pic fits well, its like devouring each other and finding the eyes irresistable! some beautiful lines in here i like this one
    Eyes, drinking
    an alcoholic stimuli
    the potency reiterated
    nice write xx Cheryl


  • neverontime
    February 25, 2006
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    Very nice write. I really like this, your metaphors are great. The imagery is a perfect fit to the poem. Very emotional and romantic write. Susan


  • wbiro gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    (you have earned the last word!)


  • lavender shadows
    February 25, 2006
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    (or a wise comeback )


  • wbiro gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    I guess you'd expect wise words in reply...

  • lavender shadows
    February 25, 2006
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    WOW! This is amazing. I didn't imagine that anyone (including myself) would be able to come up with anything this brilliant... thanks for proving me wrong here. I LOVE this piece.

    an impressed AP daughter
    (...though I've learned to expect nothing less of you)

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